Mr.Armstrong Awake and Unafraid Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 12135
March 28th, 2008 at 04:11pm
basicly share your lyrics/songs
you can ask for comments, you can ask for help in improving them aswell,
you can also post videos/audio clips of your self singing/playing (your instrument)
Be Advised: Incase of anything you should keep an extra copy of you
lyrics in your own reach, just incase of anything.
a day to remember. Thinking Happy Thoughts Age: 29 Gender: Male Posts: 426
March 31st, 2008 at 12:02am
Well, I'm pretty crappy at lyric writing, but anyway, all the songs I have are on my band myspace.
Here are the lyrics to some of my band's songs:
11 Minutes To Midnight Part One.
There's no room for mistakes or fighting for,
What you believe in, not anymore.
Selling your lies, breeding our fear,
Taking this bull shit year after year.
Oppresion and sorrow is weighing us down,
Lying, denying, until we all drown.
This warfare and bloodshed no one can see,
Please end this chaos, we're falling apart!
Even in the darkest night,
There's hope, the faintest bit of light,
But how long?
But how long will it hold?
Cast into a conforming mould,
Faking my place in the rest of the world,
Taking my time till it all ticks away,
My righteous self-conscience jumbled up in a haze.
These savages won't stop till we're all dead,
Carnage and blood thirst burned into our heads,
If a question arises, if doubt enters mind,
They'll crush it, they'll crush it, they'll burn it I say!
Even in the darkest night,
There's hope, the faintest bit of light,
But how long?
But how long will it hold?
We're spiraling downwards; catastrophe
Faster and faster, into this nightmare,
But how long?
But how long will this hold?
Your apathy, it sickens me,
All of this anguish we can't even see.
Your apathy, it sickens me,
All this fatality, we can't ever see.
Even in the darkest night,
There's hope, the faintest bit of light,
But how long?
But how long will it hold?
We're spiraling downwards; catastrophe
Faster and faster, into this nightmare,
But how long?
But how long will this hold?
Zodiac
I saw you walking home last night alone.
Did you need some company?
Your head reached the floor,
Before you could speak a word.
You screamed, but no one heard you.
There's blood on my hands, but no one can see it,
I'm as innocent as your worst nightmare.
I may be fucking crazy,
But what they don't know cant hurt them.
This subtle blade; it cuts too deep to carry on.
Don't run, don't run away. (Run faster)
Don't mind the pain,
It'll be done before you felt it.
Don't cry, the sorrow's over.
There's blood on my hands, but no one can see it,
I'm as innocent as your worst nightmare.
I may be fucking crazy,
But what they don't know cant hurt them.
There's blood on my hands, but no one can see it,
I'm as innocent as your worst nightmare.
I'm really fucking crazy,
But what they don't know cant hurt them!
Make note, I wrote Zodiac in 7th grade, so please keep that at heart.
I really want some criticism, to see how I can better myself at lyric writing.
Everybody says, 'Oh just listen to your heart!', but it's not really saying anything.
I have about six lines written for one of my other songs, "Static Expositions", so yeah, some help please?
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Mr.Armstrong Awake and Unafraid Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 12135
April 1st, 2008 at 06:39pm
are you serious??? you write amazing!
its really really good
mer von d Thinking Happy Thoughts Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 582
April 1st, 2008 at 07:34pm
wow they're fricking awesome well i'm a pretty average writer i guess, this is a song my friend shamp and i wrote for our band, criticize all you like!
"jumping castle"
i'm screaming just to block you out
coz i don't wanna hear you rant and shout
your words bring tears to my eyes coz i don't wanna live a lie
what did i do to deserve this
do you still remember our first kiss
think back to how you made me feel
i still wanna feel like that
*chorus*
i wanna go back to how you made me feel
you made me feel like a small jumping castle
on the inside
it's fun but where i am it's not
coz i'm in this other dimension
and you're not here
with me
woah oh oh
so i tell you to leave me alone and i sit here on my own
try to go back to my happy place i just wanna close my eyes
chorus
instrumentally bit
then chorus X 2
oh and this is a song i wrote by myself. i really need some help improving it but so any suggestions are welcomed with open arms
well she was just a little girl
she met him in the playground at school
by the slippery slide it was love at first sight
he had everybody fooled
she thought he was prince charming
with her heart he did toy
he used her like his little bitch as part of his sick ploy
*chorus*
well she screamed
as he lied
about all the shit
that he couldn't hide
and he laughed
as she cried
and died a little bit inside
well he caused fights with daddy
daddy didn't want him near his girl
he could see him messing with her mind
and sucking her into his world
she said daddy if you don't let me see him
i'm gonna have to run away
coz when i grow up i'm gonna marry him
and have his baby one day
chorus again then i dunno?????????
Mr.Armstrong Awake and Unafraid Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 12135
April 4th, 2008 at 09:33am
nice, you guys are really
good lyricists (songwriters)
I write lyrics all the time! Usually at night, cuz that's when I think best and write best so...here's one of my best:
Verse:
I'm lying here in the dark of this tomb
Though I'm not near I hear the cries of the room
People lying, people crying, wiping tears that they've got
Drops of blood stained in the mud as they pass the parking lot
Oh don't worry, don't be sorry, you got what everyone gets
One hundred percent life and zero percent death
But if you waste it wisely, grip onto one percent breath
At least you'll be here with me again
Refrain:
It was the look on your face
It was the arms you embraced
That made it so hard
For us to fall apart
Chorus:
If it's better off that way
Would you let me cry and say
"Goodbye and Goodnight"
"Goodbye and Goodnight"
Verse 2:
When she cries on your shoulder would you remember of me
The one you always wanted; the one you failed to appease
With every minute injection there's a story to be told
Like the groom and his whore and every man that she sold
But inside of every story, there's a chapter to read
There's one who dies and one who cries just like you and me
Refrain:
It was the smile that I missed
It was the crash of your kiss
That made it death due part
How come it feel apart
Chorus:
if it's better off that way
Would you let me cry and stay
Cuz It's too late to say goodbye
But I want to say tonight
"Goodbye and Goodnight"
"Goodbye and Goodnight"
Soft Bridge:
Far from the blood
Which fell from these slits
Would you hold on
wrap around my wrists
Clean the stains
and makeup off the bathroom floor
Is it deep enough
Without creating more
Chorus:
If it's better off that way
Would you let me cry and say
"Goodbye and Goodnight"
"Goodbye and Goodnight"
After all I've done today
Is it enough to hear me say
"Goodbye and Goodnight"
"Goodbye and Goodnight"
The chorus is pretty crappy. I'm never good at making up choruses so...hope you like it.
here are some lyrics to one of our more thrashy metal songs
buried alive you feel helpless
drowning on your own prespiration
wishing you were out of this shithole you call a life
all you want to do now is die
crazed you start tearing at your own skin
blood running rivers down your flesh
all you are wanting to do is DIE
DIE as you suffer you learn suddenly to hate
before you know it you have escaped from the crypt
that is all i can think of now what do y'all think
R U new to this website also? Cuz I am too. So...welcome! yeah...
I also write lyrics too! Can u write choruses? Cuz I suck at them...You're really good at writing lyrics.
Sorry I talk to much...
Mr.Armstrong Awake and Unafraid Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 12135
April 11th, 2008 at 09:11am
haha its alright,when you write a chorus you can sort
of switch it up each verse. thats what i do...xD
Suety Awake and Unafraid Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 14655
April 11th, 2008 at 01:06pm
The only thing I can play well is the piano..so..yea.
Dana Way Banned Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 18432
April 11th, 2008 at 05:01pm
This is one of my most recent songs that I've written.
Angel Wings
Verse:
Sitting on the edge of my bed holding your
picture against my chest. I wish you were
here next to me. Why did you have to leave
me? My life is over now that you're gone
forever.
Chorus:
Angel wings falling all around me like the
rain that falls from a gray sky. I hear your
voice but I can't see you. All I can see
are your angel wings up in the gray
sky.
Verse:
Laying on the couch covered with a blanket
watching our home videos. I can still taste
you on my lips. I smile when we kiss and
you tell me you love me. i never thought you
would leave me the way you did.
Repeat Chorus.
Bridge:
Oh, oh, no, oh, oh, I love you.
Verse:
I lay awake in bed thinking of you. I
wish you were here to comfort me so I can
finally fall asleep tonight. I look at the picture
of us on the nightstand. I smile and close my
eyes. I am finally asleep.
That's it. Hope you guys like it.
ziggy stardust; Salute You in Your Grave Age: - Gender: - Posts: 2153
April 12th, 2008 at 10:28am
Sleepless
I'm sat here alone trying to clear my mind
Getting rid of all the memories of you
But why do I try when I know inside
That I'll miss you in a day or two ?
Cause I miss what we had; I wish it wasn't true
But it is; and I do; and it hurts
I want to forget so I can sleep for a few
But I don't know how to do it; nothing works
Try to occupy my thoughts in another place
Trying to fill my time with this guitar
Not letting myself even think of your face
But I'm not getting very far...
Cause I miss what we had; I wish it wasn't true
But it is; and I do; and it hurts
I want to forget so I can sleep for a few
But I don't know how to do it; nothing works
I guess I accept that I can't move on
But I've said for so long I'm okay
Any feelings you had; they must be long gone
So I'll try to stay out of your way
Cause I miss what we had; I wish it wasn't true
But it is; and I do; and it hurts
I want to forget so I can sleep for a few
But I don't know how to do it; nothing works
Cause I miss what we had; I wish it wasn't true
But it is; and I do; and it hurts
I want to forget so I can sleep for a few
But I don't know how to do it; nothing works
I wanna forget (forget)
Let me forget (forget)
I wanna forget... but nothing works...
I wrote it the other day.. it's still pretty rough..
[I already posted it in the poetry forum so if you're thinking you've seen it before.. that's where ]
mer von d Thinking Happy Thoughts Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 582
April 13th, 2008 at 07:13pm
wow. i am totally impressed by the quality of the lyrics you guys write. fricking talented. very sweet
Suety Awake and Unafraid Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 14655
April 13th, 2008 at 08:13pm
Andrew de Torres:
geebus Suety!
That was really good.
ahhh thank you vivky
a day to remember. Thinking Happy Thoughts Age: 29 Gender: Male Posts: 426
April 13th, 2008 at 09:05pm
Hmm, can someone help me think of ideas to finish this song?
Chorus:
The open wounds you brought
Lie in the sorrow I once sought
Wish away and can't we
Hope to die, or should we?
2nd Verse:
Can love betray me?
Like a knife behind its back
The untarnished words
They never meant a thing
I knew I should let my dark emotions consume,
Let them bleed into me
Could I breathe the world for what it really is?
2nd Chorus:
These open wounds you brought
Lie in the sorrow I once sought
Wish away and can't we
Hope to die, or should we?
And these open wounds you brought
Lie in the sorrow I once sought
Wish away and can't we
Hope to die, or should we?
The empty silence in our hearts
Somehow filled with rage
It's about a breakup, if that helps. :/
anthony green. In The Murder Scene Age: 28 Gender: Female Posts: 23325
April 16th, 2008 at 07:05pm
Suffocated Lies (beware, it's long) I don't wanna be
Here anymore
Take me away
Never bring me back.
They're all around me
But I don't see
The fact that they
Aren't like me
I don't wanna be
Here anymore
Take me away
From this ugly world
I never want
To turn around
To come back here
And hear you out
I can't close my eyes
Try to pretend
That this is the place
I want to end
It's too late
To turn back now
I don't remember
My way out
It's like a nightmare
You can't wake up
It feels so real
Because you're going corrupt
They're all in false paradise
While I'm stuck here dying
And they're sick and tired
Of all the lying
I don't wanna be
Here anymore
Take me away
From this ugly world
I never want
To turn around
To come back here
And hear you out
Sick of these
Suffocated lies
I keep on going
Until I'm out of tries
Sick of these
Suffocated lies
I keep on going
Until I'm out of tries
well i'm a pretty average writer i guess, this is a song my friend shamp and i wrote for our band, criticize all you like!
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