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Black Presicion
Killjoy
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 93 | July 1st, 2008 at 11:27am
First of all, thank you so much for all the comments on my song. Seriously, those comments meant the world to me - I'm about to cry! - Especially when you, Nekotora, said that it kinda reminded you of MCR. And thanks for the advice, The Fatality, I will fix it. Cuz this song...Well, one night I had a lot of ...emotion and I really just needed to write this down and I never thought you guys would've liked it this much. Seriously, those comments mean so much to me so I really just wanted to say: Thank You.
Second:
Nekotora: Night Terrors - Holy shit, that is so freakin amazing! I could image that perfectly as a song especially the Tick Tock part which, as people have said before, reminds me of the Rock and Roll part of Crushcrushcrush. I especially like the lines:
Don’t sink deeply into trance.
They’re vyin’ for the deadly dance.
^ Just a simply amazing song
Oh and Hello Newcomer! - Strength Beyond All! (Like the name by the way)
I love your song a lot and my favorite part is the bridge and that Never Again. Because I can seriously imagine that in a song, the bridge, and the Never Again part especially. Almost in that one song by Taking Back Sunday which I can't recall because my brain can't process right now but again, love your song
The Daily Fail:
This song reminds me of Oh Star - Paramore. And I love that song because its just so inspiring and beautiful and peaceful and lots of other words I can't describe...(sorry, again, my brain can't process) just like you're song. Wow, its simply very beautiful. <3
Nekotora:
Holy shit, holy shit, holy shit, HOLY SHIT!
Ah, you have done it again!
I love you! (In a friendly way)
I love the title, Intricate Touch, and the word Intricate itself. I think it's just a beautiful word and just the title - Ah, amazing!
The song....Oh my god...Its indescribable how amazing you're song is...I love the two lines:
No waving goodbye
And the letters won't give a cry/won't fuckin cry
I love those lines out of all of them. I don't know, they just kind of reach out to me...If you know what I mean.
Maybe you can change give to send...But seriously the song is fucking amazing.
Again, I love you (in a friendly way)
I love all of you! You all have amazing writing skills and such amazing indescribable talent! I KNOW you will all go far with this talent. |
Hatebreeder.
Salute You in Your Grave
Age: 29
Gender: Male
Posts: 2016 | July 1st, 2008 at 02:02pm I have Finished My lyrics now.
Oh...... I chose a name............ All Hope Is Gone:
Verse 1:
Can You Feel The World,
It Rests On Your Shoulders.
Can You See The World,
It's A Place Of Destruction.
Can You Hear The Sounds,
Of This Brutal Place?
Take A Good Hard Look At This World,
For The Last Time!
Chorus 1:
The World Is Crashing (Burning Down),
And You Wonder Why This Is (Why This Is).
Here, Hell Is Already Found (Already Found),
We're All In This Sick Twist (Sick Twist)
Bridge:
There's Not much Longer,
The World Ceases To Exist.
Don't Try To Run And Hide,
This Is The End!!!!
(Never Again x4)
Verse 2:
Can You Feel The Time,
It's Running Out.
Can You See This World,
It's A Damning Sight.
Can You Hear The Sounds,
Of This Twisted Place.
Take A Good Hard Look At This World,
For The Last Time!
Chorus 2:
The World Is Crashing (Burning Down),
And You Wonder Why This Is (Why This Is).
Here, Hell Is Already Found (Already Found),
We're All In This Sick Twist (Sick Twist).
Now Look To The Sky (The Sky),
And Realise We're Going To Die (Die!).
Take A Good Hard Look At This World,
For The Last Time!
Bridge:
There's Not Much Longer,
The World Ceases To Exist.
Don't Try To Run And Hide,
This Is The End!!!!!
(Never Again! X4)
Interlude:
All Hope Is Slipping Away...
(All Hope Is Slipping Away...)
Slipping Through My Fingers...
(Slipping Through My Fingers...)
All Hope Is Gone........
Bridge:
There's Not Much Longer,
The World Ceases To Exist.
Don't Try To Run And Hide,
This Is The End!!!!!!!
(Never Again!!!!! X4)
Outro:
All Hope Is Slipping Away...
(All Hope Is Slipping Away...)
Slipping Through My Fingers...
(Slipping Through My Fingers...)
These Are Our Last Moments Alive...
(These Are Our Last Moments Alive...)
All Hope Is Gone.......................... |
Kitty Clover
Jazz Hands
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 292 | July 1st, 2008 at 02:56pm The Fatality: I love your song! The meaning in it is amazing, and I couldn’t find a favorite part because I love all of it! ^_^
Black Presicion: Thanks so much! ;]
It means so much to me that you like the songs and that my words speak out, because I write my lyrics to speak to people in some way.
Strength Beyond All: It’s awesome that you finished the song! I love the title by the way and the completed lyrics astound me! I love the ending especially :] |
Kitty Clover
Jazz Hands
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 292 | July 1st, 2008 at 03:17pm This is a song I came up with last night. It's a fun sort of sarcastic song but it has a whole lot of meaning in it. The title is "Fashionable Sedate". :>
Ready, go!
We’ll just cheat the mind.
It’ll be fun!
Just shine, back, shine.
Bring the new black!
Another conviction?
Yeah, breathe it in.
It’s a taken discussion-
Relief and discipline.
Chorus
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Am I “jumping for joy”?
Hook me up!
I’m gonna start singing,
It’ll leave a ringing.
Stereo’s blasting,
Your ears are sighing?
Turn up the volume!
No room for lying.
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Pulling the “blind act”?
Cherishing the “cure”?
We’ll show you, love,
Choose a party favor.
Let’s stare and gaze
At the remnant stars,
Then back at sunrise-
Its rays and jars.
(Chorus 2x)
Yeahhhhhhhh yeah |
Hatebreeder.
Salute You in Your Grave
Age: 29
Gender: Male
Posts: 2016 | July 1st, 2008 at 03:46pm Nekotora:The Fatality: I love your song! The meaning in it is amazing, and I couldn’t find a favorite part because I love all of it! ^_^
Black Presicion: Thanks so much! ;]
It means so much to me that you like the songs and that my words speak out, because I write my lyrics to speak to people in some way.
Strength Beyond All: It’s awesome that you finished the song! I love the title by the way and the completed lyrics astound me! I love the ending especially :] This is actually my first go at writing lyrics. |
Kitty Clover
Jazz Hands
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 292 | July 1st, 2008 at 09:37pm ^It's good that you wrote those lyrics, because you have talent ^_^ |
Black Presicion
Killjoy
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 93 | July 1st, 2008 at 09:42pm Yes, I agree with you Nekotora ^
And Your Welcome 
Haha, I love your latest song. And I love how it is sarcastic (Me being sarcastic myself) it makes it very unique. I think (hard choice though) that my favorite verse is:
Pulling the “blind act”?
Cherishing the “cure”?
We’ll show you, love,
Choose a party favor.
You've astounded me again <3 |
Kitty Clover
Jazz Hands
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 292 | July 2nd, 2008 at 02:19pm ^Aw thank you! :]
I'm glad you like the sarcasm of it. |
Asiah Scott
Joining The Black Parade
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 194 | July 6th, 2008 at 04:41am Strength beyond all: Wow. I love it. I can totally relate to it and love how you have defined your feelings. Keep writing. xD
Nekotora: This is amazing again! And I agree with "Black Precision"...the sarcasm rocks. xD |
Asiah Scott
Joining The Black Parade
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 194 | July 6th, 2008 at 04:43am This is a song I wrote right now. I hope you like it. Not one of my best but lets see. Feel free to advice or comment. xD
*Its Hard To Forget You*
I have nothing else to do
Then keep bottling my feelings
I want to take to the woods
This indolent pain isnt healing
And you're still not here
To rescue me from this agony
Well, I think you are the one
Who started this misery
[Chorus]
And now it hurts, it bleeds
So painfully
There's no cure, no answer
No remedy
Its hard to say
But I cant forget you
I open and shut my eyes
And still keep missing you
Its hard to forget you...
[Verse]
I dont know where to go
I have lost my path
I might impinge in your way
Like you did in my heart
I will make you suffer injuries
Retaliation is the only antidote
It will counteract for the pain you gave me
So stop hiding behind that black coat
[Chorus]
And now it hurts, it bleeds
So painfully
There's no cure, no answer
No remedy
Its hard to say
But I cant forget you
I open and shut my eyes
And still keep missing you
Its hard to forget you...
[Ending Verse]
The bruises have gone
But scars are still left
My mind is aching
So very bad
[Chorus]
And now it hurts, it bleeds
So painfully
There's no cure, no answer
No remedy
Its hard to say
But I cant forget you
I open and shut my eyes
And still keep missing you
Its hard to forget you... |
Kitty Clover
Jazz Hands
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 292 | July 6th, 2008 at 04:15pm ^Thanks Asiah! I love your new song and the honesty in it. The intense feeling of it is described so well and the hurt and vengeful feeling that came across from it. very well done! :] |
Black Presicion
Killjoy
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 93 | July 6th, 2008 at 09:40pm I agree with Nekotora! Its very well written and I like how its very blunt but, like Nekotora said, it has an intense feeling to it. |
Asiah Scott
Joining The Black Parade
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 194 | July 7th, 2008 at 04:30am Thanks alot Nekotora and Maddie. XD
I am glad you liked it. =) |
Miss Americvnt
Bleeding on the Floor
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 1163 | July 8th, 2008 at 10:41pm I'm having major lyric issues.
My friend came up with some amaaazing guitar riffs and chord progressions and whatnot..
So he asked me to write lyrics..
Meh.
Not going so well.
I've got some things...
Things floating around in my head:
He said "I love you" in big bold letters
I'd be a liar if I said it didn't mean a thing
and
Say what I need to hear
And all the things I never would have guessed
Say what I need to hear
Lie to me and tell me I'm the best
You've ever met
and
I'm so miserable without you, it's kind of like you're here
A mess I had to sweep under the rug for company's sake
Yeah. It's really freaking hard.
Anyone want to throw me a line?
I'm open for anything. I haven't written a song in about three years, so keep that in mind...(that's why it sucks)..
But if you happen to see potential in what I have, feel free to help expand or tell me what I should change. =]
[p.s. If it helps, I'm writing a song about lies, deceit, and being led on and let down.] |
anthony green.
In The Murder Scene
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 23325 | July 9th, 2008 at 01:45am new theme, new lyrics 
(if you're too lazy to check my profile, i used to be the daily fail.)
so this one's called "fued", and it's about my best friend. at the moment she's ~uberpissed and i have no idea why, so i wrote this.
don't tell me i should get shot
don't tell me to go away
i don't know what i've done to you
why do you act this way?
this feud has gone on too far
will you please tell me what is wrong?
assist me for i'm blind to this
can you tell me why you're mad?
can you tell me why you're pissed
can we please end this?
tell me (PLEASE)
i was just depressed at best
can you blame me for being human?
you went so far to call me names
hun, you've crossed the line.
what the hell?
what did i do?
talk to me, at least.
i've called you just a thousand times
but you refuse to answer.
pick up the phone
call me back
tell me what i've done
i've messed up,
i know that much
but please
just tell me (PLEASE)
i was just depressed at best
can you blame me for being human?
i was just depressed at best
can you blame me for being human?
i know i'm stupid
i know that much
i can't change your mind
yell at me all you really want
but what happened to forgive and (FORGET)? |
Asiah Scott
Joining The Black Parade
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 194 | July 9th, 2008 at 05:53am L's Strawberry: Well, returning on to the track after 3 years and writing a fantastic song...its something to be proud of. xD I really like it but it seems that you are retaining some of the emotions. You definitely have the potential and your song is really good. Just write down all that you feel in a cogent manner. Else, I like it. xD. Cant wait to see more. XD
The Scenic Nowhere:You are just amazing. I love the emotions there and it really suits the situation. Welldone. xD |
Kitty Clover
Jazz Hands
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 292 | July 9th, 2008 at 04:20pm L's Strawberry.: I agree with Asiah. You should write down what you feel first because it's much easier to come up with lyrics that way and I absolutely love what you've done so far! Another thing is to think of what might happen to someone who has been let down before if you haven't experienced that, because that really helps :]
The Scenic Nowhere.: I love the song and the expression and honesty in it. The lyrics just rock and the whole thing was awesome! ^_^ |
Miss Americvnt
Bleeding on the Floor
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 1163 | July 9th, 2008 at 05:10pm Asiah Scott and Nekotora: Thank you both! See, my problem is I know exactly what I want to write about, a very recent experience..but when I write I have a hard time makng it into a song, it comes out more like a journal entry, all long and drawn out.
I gotta work on that. =/
=] Thank you again for your help! |
anthony green.
In The Murder Scene
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 23325 | July 10th, 2008 at 12:40am ahaha, i can never keep a theme, can i!? this should get confusing xD
well, thanks for the comments unfortunately that friend is still pissed at me even though i sent her those lyrics 
but i wrote a new one! ftw! (i'm a tad hyper today.)
it's called "our little secret" and it's about a girl who is raped and becomes pregnant, and this is basically what she would say to the guy who raped her if she ever met him again.
i said no so many times
but you just took advantage
i spend my days crying now
you can't deny what you did to me.
i've got something to say to you.
this is all your fault
and there was no consent
i made it clear
but you said "i insist"
you threw me down on the floor
of that empty room
you broke me in two.
i told you to stop
you told me to keep my mouth shut
i refuse to keep this our little secret.
why did you hurt me
why did you kill me a little inside?
i said it once
far more than twice
i told you no so many times
but you did it anyways.
i feared for my life
now i fear for hers
i'm far too young
to be giving birth
but you took advantage,
tell me why?
i told you to stop
you told me to keep my mouth shut
i refuse to keep this our little secret.
i said (NO)
i told you (STOP)
then you said (NO)
you wouldn't (STOP)
i can't forgive you for this
i can't forget what you did
and i can't forgive you for this
i can't forget what you did
now what can i do? |
Asiah Scott
Joining The Black Parade
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 194 | July 10th, 2008 at 10:13am Hannah: Again, I just love it. You have your own way with words. And you are a great lyricist. xD |
