Your Songs/Lyrics
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no face. Awake and Unafraid Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 13483 | |
Kitty Clover Jazz Hands Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 292 | bert mccracken: those lyrics are amazing! my favorite part is the chorus and the thing about masks is so different in a good way, you're a great lyricist! :] black presicion: i love the beginning and the way you've structured the song! i especially love the bridge and i think the first title "Hello" is the best ^_^ |
Miss Americvnt Bleeding on the Floor Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 1163 | Liaison you can see straight through me and i see all the possibilities. im sleep deprived and yours for the taking. so take me. waking up in cold sweats dreaming 'bout what we could do. dreaming of a love affair with you. stuck in this moment with my starlit eyes searching for the words to say. the fading night sky's not as bright as your eyes, they shine for me. just for me. waking up in cold sweats dreaming 'bout what we could do. dreaming of a love affair with you. That's all I got so far... By the way, "liaison" is French for "love affair". =] |
Kitty Clover Jazz Hands Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 292 | i think it's really good! i'm surprised no one has been on this thread for awhile. that's awesome how you used french for the title. the chorus is beautiful and romantic, it's like a fantasy and i can't wait to see the rest of it! :] |
Miss Americvnt Bleeding on the Floor Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 1163 | Oh, thank you sooo much! Yeah, I was like," Oh noes! My song killed the lyrics thread!" |
Kitty Clover Jazz Hands Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 292 | you're welcome and it didn't kill the thread lol |
anthony green. In The Murder Scene Age: 28 Gender: Female Posts: 23325 | been a while since i've been here i got grounded for about three weeks, and in those weeks i wrote a few lyrics. i've been working on storytelling more and not just focusing on a single thing. so, without further ado, my lyrics: voices i wrote this about someone who hears voices in their head, and they're sort of going insane, asking them who they are, what they want, and can't they annoy someone else. while the likeliness of sunlight is so low, get on your bed, throw out the pillow, you won't be sleeping tonight. no, you won't be sleeping tonight. you'll be up late tonight, you'll be asking, (no answers) and avoiding the turth. who are they? what are they? won't they leave you alone? they are the voices in your head (do you hear them?) just like you, just like me, but they don't exist. can you hear these words? you're saying no, maybe, perhaps, but why? can't leave it alone. can't see beyond the confines where are they? (in your mind) where am i? what do you want from me? what can i do? i think you've got the wrong number insanity won't make me sane. they are the voices in your head (do you hear them?) just like you, just like me, but they don't exist. you don't believe them. leave it alone, (leave me be) there's nothing you can do. you've got yourself, in a corner painted in, and written on your face, "i give up!" to write love on her arms this is kind of like a remake of "serious business", except more in story format. she says nothing's wrong, but she's lying. just a scratch, just an accident, but the cuts grow in numbers and they don't realize because she hides. something's wrong and she knows but as long as the razor's sharp as long as the blood stains the sheets and the scars heal to write love on her arms, it would be the best thing for everyone who loves her, cares for her. she says that the scars don't matter but they do, they do, they matter so much words can't help her she's deaf in your ear any deeper, any more and it'll be the end of her life of her situation but that's what she wants to write love on her arms, it would be the best thing for everyone who loves her, cares for her. and so she wrote the words L-O-V-E she wrote big letters and she wrote love on her arms. bars this one i wrote about someone who died in a barfight, stabbed in the heart. i'm dead but i'm far from gone. carry the corpse, i'm already miles away. but i can see you, burying the body. no need to say a prayer i'm already in hell waiting for you yeah, you'll come to me someday. a kinfe through the heart can end a life but it can end the silence the calm before the storm help me find my life, i seem to have lost it. tell them not to look for me. tell them it's no use. tell them what you did, no, that would do the worst for what you're worth. all because of an upset drunk and unconcious my final memory is my worst i won't let you forget i can't forgive, i left my heart in the body. a kinfe through the heart can end a life but it can end the silence the calm before the storm help me find my life, i seem to have lost it. do you remember my tragedy? forgot what you did to me? i'll never let you forget. i'll see you in hell. help me, i'm helpless. this one is about depression, mainly from my encounters. i've been thrown off the edge words on a tearstained page are not enough to end this i just don't feel quite right. razorblades don't seem to help tears are temporary yes it's true, i don't care about you let me figure it out. happy seems so far awat. miles and miles, and i've got square wheels this cliff leads straight to rock bottom. what's wrong with me, why can't i see ahead of me? it's within my reach but my arms are glued i can't move. razorblades don't seem to help tears are temporary yes it's true, i don't care about you let me figure it out. i'm my own bulldozer, my own disaster. your favorite tragedy help to me is my defeat, this prescription will be my downfall. razorblades don't seem to help tears are temporary yes it's true, i don't care about you let me figure it out. the nicotine kiss remember when i had those two choruses, and i got serious business written first, and never really got around to writing abusive addiction? well, it's because i was making some huge changes. so, this is the finished product: every time you're here, you're drunk and swing black and blue are all i know tears won't stop you most of me is in pain but the rest is in love with you your nicotine kiss is my addiction your abuse my drugs and these tears are the anti but they don't seem to work. it doesn't matter how hard, how much i'm hanging on i'm willing to stay but you're not trying all you like is my pain. you don't care at all. there is no rehab. no hope for me. i'm a full-on addict for your tough love. your nicotine kiss is my addiction your abuse my drugs and these tears are the anti but they don't seem to work. knock me down, knock me out hit me hard i like it like that something tells me, this is wrong i can't break free i'm under your spell. katrina this one i wrote a while ago, and i found it while i was flipping through an old notebook. the way i wrote it, i was trying to make it seem like it was about this girl that was ruthless, and she'll kill you, but it's actually about hurricane katrina. terrorizing beauty, she doesn't give up she's armed and she's dangerous she's a hurricane, she's katrina. she's a fighter, what a bitch to resist but now she lies she's broken, dead and gone she knows she's beat katrina, katrina she pulled the trigger and left us all to die. she's a killer and she'll bring you down. you can't do a thing. katrina, she's a ruthless thing. she'll kill you with just one glance and she won't give a damn. katrina, katrina she pulled the trigger and left us all to die. she left her mark and now she's gone she's killed us all so now she's done rebuild our battlefield rebuild our everything katrina, katrina, she pulled the trigger and left us all to die she's a hurricane she's a hurricane she's a hurricane and she won't give a damn. |
MilitaryFairy Killjoy Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 83 | Uuum... I honestly don't think this is very good. Some pointers are always great! I don't know the title either. Sunshine sets Only you know me best Don’t sleep in the east When I’m setting in the west Patience can kill Like bugs God’s window sill Forget me not Please say that you will Laughter breaks the silence Such pail, fragile glass Don’t break like my confidence Because only you know me best Your dresses come in many colors Like a prism of your past Or a rainbow blend of slight confusion Just know the sunsets never last Lightening strikes in the same place twice And you never forget the scars If I could live a thousand years I would not turn into what you are There’s always second chances They’re always a better way But if you want to walk down that bend There’s nothing more to say |
intuition11 Killjoy Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 1 | this is just something i'm working on Wake up Flush all my happiness away A different pill for all the tragedies of the day Try to find the innocence that I had left behind In a web of addiction Well I got to try to make it through the day If I can do it Maybe I’ll be ok And not craving with every breath And not sinking with every step |
Black Presicion Killjoy Age: 28 Gender: Female Posts: 93 | Wow, seriously, you don't think it's good? I really like it! A lot! And I'm not just saying that to make you feel good - I'm telling the truth. I love these lines the best: Your dresses come in many colors Like a prism of your past (<-amazing!) Lightening strikes in the same place twice There's nothing more to say (<- I love the ending and how you just end with a simple line like this but, at the same time, it's saying everything.) Only thing is that it's a bit forced rhyming but that's okay - I've done that millions of times before. You're a really good lyricist! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Well, I have a new song. It, um... It just means the world to me because this is written to my absolute best friend in the whole fucking world and I know this might be a bit confusing but... it's hard to explain what I'm trying to say to her. Stars are kind of my figurative thing... well, I'm rambling but this is mainly about a certain.... event that happened one day.... It's called Breathe... hope you like it. (Song: soft but powerful feel) Verse 1: Hold on, I have so much to wish (<-hope?) Since you fell upon me My memories consume my mind But the words won't escape me Refrain: Wait, don't fall away from me Hear me please Let me stay forever I'm sorry Chorus: (powerful) Please don't ever go away Save those scars and breathe for me (I don't know if i should have "for me" in there) Cause I won't let you fall today Please don't ever fade from me Verse 2: Now it's so hard to think of what to say The longer I hold in The more you slip away Refrain: Wait, don't pass away from me Hear me please Let me stay forever I'm sorry (<- higher, more powerful in this line) Chorus: Please don't ever go away Save your scars and breathe for me (<-optional) Cause I won't let you fall today Please don't ever fade from me Bridge: These dreams won't ever escape Oh, its so hard to explain These dreams won't ever go away I'm sorry Chorus: Please don't ever go away Save your scars and breathe for me Cause I won't let you fall today Please don't ever fade from me Outro: (Soft) Hold on, I have so much to say To a star that shines like you I won't let you fade (<-High, powerful) Please breathe for me (soft - the end) (Should I add that in there?) Okay, so in the choruses I'm not sure if I should switch the second and fourth line or not. And I have a guitar part for the outro and I know how the vocals should go for the outro... and I might have a second guitar part for it too - I'm not entirely sure. If you guys could help me with what I said along the song and just now, that'd be great. Thank You. |
brand new eyes Always Born a Crime Age: 29 Gender: Female Posts: 6798 | wow, everyone on here is so talented.<3 i really need to improve my stuff. when i have something halfway good i'll post. |
goodbye blue sky Always Born a Crime Age: 29 Gender: Female Posts: 6461 | parawhore.: OMG! I liked all of them very much! Keep writing hon! |
anthony green. In The Murder Scene Age: 28 Gender: Female Posts: 23325 | :] thanks, Dove Melankolia! i wrote another one a bit ago...it's called "lullabye" (i spelled it wrong on purpose) and it's about suicide. it's kind of hard to explain what i mean by "lullaby", but i think once you read it you might get it. lullabye sing me a lullaby so i can fall asleep i'll stay as long as i can't breathe nothing's keeping me here. i wasn't born to be bound no electricity can save me now where have you been those five years ago? whatever i said, you answered no. i'm not here you're standing there i see you, you don't see me. there are no tears. there is no regret. i remember my last words. sing me a lullaby so i can fall asleep i'll stay as long as i can't breathe nothing's keeping me here. there was no blood, no time to scream, it all worked out in my end. i didn't want your help. you can lie and say you miss me but i'm not coming back i wrote a letter but you can't read, why do i care? you never did. i remember my last words. sing me a lullaby so i can fall asleep i'll stay as long as i can't breathe nothing's keeping me here. you handed me the loaded gun and as i held it to my head i screamed "this is all your fault!" note: the outro is spoken, it's not really supposed to be smooth, so yeah :$ |
MilitaryFairy Killjoy Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 83 | Thank you, Black Precision, you have awesome lyrics yourself |
Black Presicion Killjoy Age: 28 Gender: Female Posts: 93 | Thanks Parawhore: (By the way LOVE the name) I also wrote a song called lullaby but I really like how you used 'by' as 'bye'. I thought that was really clever. Personally, I just thought the song was really well written and unique in how you organized it! Please keep writing! --------------------------------------------------------------- Well, you know the song I last wrote? I have a couple more songs about the same thing...I'm still guilty, I always will be... Broken Wings: Can we make this temporary? These silent lies are about to break your heart carried by broken wings And I blame myself Now my thoughts consume me I was so blind, so naive of what I feared to see when all along Your heart was flying with broken wings And I'm so sorry That I could let love die I made it so hard to be alive And I can't believe I didn't take your pain away I almost let you slip away Now can we make this permanent? And promise scars won't let us break our hearts and fix our broken wings But I still blame myself And I'm so sorry I let myself fall through You know, I'd always die for you And I'm so sorry I had to see you cry You know, I'd bleed myself dry And I'm so sorry I let you fly with broken wings ~~~~~ Perfections: (I might change the title to: 'So Alive' or 'Alive') And I hopelessly fall in whispers My words tremble at your cries We're softly breaking in hidden shadows Oh please tell me you're still alive Why forgiving exchanges? I'm the only one to apologize You're weakness is only one more perfection You're strength gives me the power to fly You breathe so much air into my lungs And yet all I can do is sigh Your empty defect had my envy at rage (Instead of empty defect, it might be 'Your grand Pheonix' which I might use instead...) Left my selfishness to arise I was blinded by fear of saying goodbye I'm the only fake in my lie Why forgiving exchanges? I'm the only one to apologize You know how my wings can be fragile But with you I can let them die My words can escape me so gracefully I've never felt so alive ~~~~~~~~~~~~~ (This is about something different that I wrote just this morning) I Believe: Verse - Forgive me for my hesitant words with the cautious mayhem in my mind Never have my thoughts believed like this But I feel your words Your presence heard The unthinkable is breathing I'm breathing Verse 2 - Forgive me My half - trust only dwells in my thoughts and dreams I may not present my faith Are you listening for this sounds to restore innocence for you The unthinkable is alive I'm alive Bridge - Can I live without this selfishness? Be free but still be heard with limited sound My free-form spirit flows (or hangs - idk) in the air Loyalty still not demanding But, yes, I believe --------------------------------------------- Er, yeah. That's it. Tips please! |
Charlie Chaplin Thinking Happy Thoughts Age: 33 Gender: - Posts: 468 | Comments are appreciated. This song is about lust, in case the meaning was lost in the wild metaphors. ;] Consuming the apparition with desire she moves like a shape seen in a dream. The fire in her heart is burning like a thousand candles, yet her words are lost. Sustain the outcome, disappear to a new beginning. Sustain like the sun, the writing on the wall is uncovered. We are a thousand lovers engulfed in a thousand arms. And we're too blind to see that we are killing ourselves She's a captivating lover, she heals my wounds. Steadfast modesty! Take the children from the elders beds, replace their lust with a stronger emotion. The great fire burns, we are the only ones to control it. Lay your weapons down, put down your arms. Take your virtue back, we are the only ones Don't shield your eyes child, there are things you should know like how we're drowning in our own sweat, we are our own downfall. Don't shield your eyes child, we've made a crucial mistake, we've been playing in the devil's yard, now is the time for change. Sustain the outcome, disappear to a new beginning. Sustain like the sun, the writing on the wall is uncovered. Close your eyes now, its time to say your prayers. Seal your nightmare, this is a fantasy world. She's left sleeping in a time of war. Cold through the air, its time to say your prayers 'goodbye to the world!' |
MilitaryFairy Killjoy Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 83 | This one is called "Junior Highs and Lows" Constructive critism is always awesome (V2) The clown faces splattered the room Frizzy hair and yellow molars I was an ugly duckling in their view I wanted to put a stick in their heads 13 queens and no one to rule To break the trend I had to break the rules (Chorus- kind of like the "Whoa Oh" by Forever the Sickest Kids feel" I say oh well Oh oh well Things change over time I say oh well Oh oh well I’ll let this go somehow (V2) Now they’re ugly butterflies I’m still the lovely duckling They fake their way through everything Rotten apples fill the air They let it seep inside To think I thought you were the golden one (Bridge) All these junior highs and lows The scars built up inside And you don’t even know You made me give up hope And you don’t even know |
Black Presicion Killjoy Age: 28 Gender: Female Posts: 93 | Oh I like both songs very much! Charlie Chaplin: I love how your song has so many metophorical phrases and figurative language because I love figurative language. Its fun to figure out the meaning and you can interpret it different ways. You're a very talented lyricist. You should be very proud. thegiftofoneliners: I love this song and I know what you mean with the chorus. Becuase I'd do that to. Its usually when I have a song stuck in my head, I would write lyrics that could replace the lyrics in the song stuck in my head. And the "Whoa oh" feel fits really well in the chorus. Please continue writing - both of you! |
Charlie Chaplin Thinking Happy Thoughts Age: 33 Gender: - Posts: 468 | Black Presicion: Well thank you very much miss ;] |
MilitaryFairy Killjoy Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 83 | Black Presicion: Thank you very much! You always say nice things about my little songs... |
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