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MyChemicalBlack
Salute You in Your Grave
MyChemicalBlack
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January 6th, 2009 at 04:58pm
Man, how'd I miss the new poems. *smacks forehead*
Out of all of them (which are all good to me) I'd have to say "Killing Love" is my favorite.
It's very relatable.

Well done. Smiley
TeamEdward
Fabulous Killjoy
TeamEdward
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 125
January 7th, 2009 at 03:22pm
Resistant

My books always a mess,
Revision is none existant.
Why is all this stress,
So very persistant?

I do try most of the time,
But I'm never in the mood.
Will I have to resort to crime,
To pay for my food.

I want to leave education,
Go towards music instead.
Oh what an awkward situation,
A war between my heart and my head.

People want great things for me,
Everything they never had.
If what will be, will be,
Then why am I going mad.
MyChemicalBlack
Salute You in Your Grave
MyChemicalBlack
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January 7th, 2009 at 06:05pm
Love the last stanza, very powerful.
Nice work. Smiley
Your Ghost.
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Your Ghost.
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 440
January 7th, 2009 at 08:24pm
I really like Resistant. Its very veryy gooodd. Very Happy
TeamEdward
Fabulous Killjoy
TeamEdward
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 125
January 22nd, 2009 at 01:52pm
Glam...or?

Is that life what it seems?
The glamour, the fame?
Her face simply beams,
As people shout her name.

She's had the man,
She's had the cars.
Now she's got a ban,
From most big bars.

Her life's become a mess,
Was it destined from the start?
Gone is her designer dress,
Gone is her fans heart.

Was it the drugs?
Was it the drink?
Was it the paparazzi thugs?
That made it all sink?

So is this what I wanna be?
Constantly in the public eye?
Never ever being free,
Forever living the lie.
Day Old Hate
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Day Old Hate
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 423
January 22nd, 2009 at 02:10pm
Hey, I really like your poems, and this is coming from a person who doesn't like poetry with a rhyme scheme!
You have a great talent for conveying emotion in your writing, carry on writing!
TeamEdward
Fabulous Killjoy
TeamEdward
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 125
January 30th, 2009 at 11:43am
Money business

It's all about profit,
Is that what I hear?
It's all about profit,
Is that right my dear?

It's all about money,
And buying the best.
Oh it's so funny,
To fuck up the rest.

Sell things, anything,
That people don't need.
Don't consider anything,
It's all about greed.

The futures not here,
It's ages away.
So don't fear,
Throw money away.

Show off what you get,
And spend,spend,spend.
Buy yourself into debt,
Then borrow off a friend.

Forget about saving,
And that rainy day.
It's all about raving,
It's all about play.

I need new gear,
I need new things.
But oh how I fear,
When that phone rings.
The Broken Choker
Killjoy
The Broken Choker
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Gender: Female
Posts: 23
January 31st, 2009 at 07:31pm
Well, I have something against your poem that starts like
"An idea that is absurd,
To people like you and me.
She left without a word,
Because of pain we couldn't see."

In one of the lines, it seems to me that you are saying that she made you think she was sane or something like that. So she's insane because she's gone? She might have been perfectly sane when it happened (if it happened). She might have just been thinking that it's her only way out and that it's a path she feels was necessary for her to take. If you had the chance to truly see her, would you put her in an institution because she thinks bad thoughts? Would you try to chide her already made up mind? Would you change her because that's who she is? You can't put that force upon her. You should just respect her decision.
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(I tend to get offended often) Please excuse me if that just ruined your day. I don't wish for you to be mad at me, I was simply stating my opinion from what I got from your poem. Sorry
lolis12007
Really Not Okay
lolis12007
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 655
January 31st, 2009 at 10:19pm
I love your poems they are very good!
TeamEdward
Fabulous Killjoy
TeamEdward
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 125
February 5th, 2009 at 10:27am
Needing to feel love,
I reach out to you.
Praying to the above,
I'll do what I have to do.

I need to feel something,
Anything at all please.
Objects mean nothing,
As I fall to my knees.

Putting my hands together,
I make a silent pact.
A promise that's lasts forever,
More faith than fact.

I'm sorry I do sin,
I'm sorry I do lie.
But my desire to win,
Will be there till I die.
TeamEdward
Fabulous Killjoy
TeamEdward
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 125
February 18th, 2009 at 11:35am
The Fame Game

Looking through a telescope, climbing up a tree.
Someone is forever watching me.
It's hard to pretend their not there.
When all they do is constantly stare.

I try to tell them to go away.
But they just laugh and say.
Make my day, fool around.
Break your nose, jump into a crowd.

Have tantrums and get drunk.
Everybody wants to see a punk.
They want to see you as a normal gal.
So go ahead snog your pal.

I need the money to pay rent.
So go to town and get spent.
I cant get away but i don't care.
Cus I know i'm not the only one out there.


NOTE: hey erm basically this poems is written through someones eyes when they are talking the paparazzi and what the paparazzi is saying, if that makes sense haha. its a really old poem so its not very well done but just thought i should put it up anyway, thanks
TeamEdward
Fabulous Killjoy
TeamEdward
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 125
March 14th, 2009 at 12:25pm
Supermodel

I don't exactly look appertising,
In fact I'm so hideous, it's surprising.
That I even bother to go out at all,
Cus I ain't got a flat stomach an i ain't tall.

I ain't pretty or very clever,
And I can't pull off leather.
Even when I put make- up on,
You can't even tell it's done.

I ain't a supermodel,
No not at all.
So call me jealous or bitter,
but my god their so much fitter.

The only way,
I would get a man today.
If he was a stalker,
A creepy fat, ugly stalker.

But to be quite frank,
I would rather hav money in the bank.
Men are so shallow, they only want a model,
Hell, even pete doherty can get one like Katie.

NOTE: erm i think it would prob fit more into a song but for now its just a poem. crit an comment welcome cheers x Smile
TeamEdward
Fabulous Killjoy
TeamEdward
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 125
March 27th, 2009 at 06:03pm
Your my life's rock
My carved marble prince
Your beauty came as a shock
And I've been dazzled ever since

We make a mix match pair
Your perfection shines on
You pretend you don't care
But I feel like it's a con

You then run away
I fall into a dark pit
I can't pretend I'm okay
I can't pretend I'll handle it

What happened to the fairytale
What happened to the fantasy
My body grows frail
I no longer care for reality
TeamEdward
Fabulous Killjoy
TeamEdward
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 125
June 1st, 2009 at 06:15am
the last poem is inspired by a book, if your a fan you will know which one it is Smile
TeamEdward
Fabulous Killjoy
TeamEdward
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 125
June 1st, 2009 at 06:40pm
Lollipops and Cigarettes

It's lollipops and cigarettes,
Its bitter sugar and cold sex.
Its a boy, it's a girl,
Its a smoke and sugar swirl.

I tried for you,
I cried for you.
I lied for you,
I died inside for you.

You take no note,
Of the whispers in my throat.
You ignore the tone,
Of my agonizing moan.

You my love, my Romeo,
A twisted fairytale, I can't let go.
Our lives are entwined,
A breaks hard to find.

Am I love sick,
sick, sick, sick.
Or sick of love,
Love, Love, Love.



i literally wrote this as i typed it on here so apologies for lack of polishing x
riot reality
Jazz Hands
riot reality
Age: 29
Gender: Female
Posts: 295
June 24th, 2009 at 11:13pm
Hi, I was just reading your poems (I stopped at the one from 9/23/08.), and I just wanted to tell you that YOU ARE FREAKING AMAZING! Some of those brought tears to my eyes even, I just adored them.
riot reality
Jazz Hands
riot reality
Age: 29
Gender: Female
Posts: 295
June 25th, 2009 at 04:19pm
Hey, I read some of your poems and then I just finished up the rest.

You. Are. Amazing.

Just thought I'd say... xD
MyChemicalBlack
Salute You in Your Grave
MyChemicalBlack
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July 14th, 2009 at 12:33am
My, my...how'd I miss these new poems? *mentally kicking himself*

Anyways, they're all wonderfully written. Smiley
Flow, a scheme type, etc.

Great work. Smile
Rayessez
Killjoy
Rayessez
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Posts: 14
July 28th, 2009 at 12:51pm
i was once down on my luck
owning nothing but an old rusty truck
i drove that old beast
which wasnt pretty to say the least
because it was always covered in muck

enjoy my LIMERICK