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severus.
Awake and Unafraid
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 12901 | March 31st, 2009 at 10:55pm
I don't visit this forum often but I clicked the link in your profile and, wow. I'm not terribly articulate or well-versed in poetry so all I'll say is you're very talented and definitely have my vote for Poet of the Month if it matters any. |
souverian.
Demolition Lover
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 19169 | April 3rd, 2009 at 08:04pm ^ thank you so much for the comments =]
not to sure about this one so comments would be nice =]
The Alchemist
Freckled was his face and embellished were his eyes
Irritated stones of ruby that peered eerily above a tirade of flies,
He was the Sigmund Freud in the morning of psychological minds
And Oppenheimer's bomb beneath the whisks of shielded blinds,
Triggered for explosion by everyday news flashing on his screen
He padlocked his childhood cabin for the science of serene.
His favorable discoveries cursed by the demons of time
So the scientist of love buried all his revelations
Beneath self-loathing grime.
It was 60 years and 60 wives,
He sacrificed for the forbearing of zealous lives
Comatose is the scientific study of human love
And all the 60 wedlock's could swoon scientific notions
To fully tranced deceptions that left his chalkboards devoid of emotions.
40 days and 40 nights of deep unconsciousness for the study of devotion
He was the absentminded scientist who killed for elation
A spellbound creature lost in an ocean of psychosis
An ocean of translation. |
believing.
Salute You in Your Grave
Age: 30
Gender: Male
Posts: 2318 | April 4th, 2009 at 03:03am ^ that is amazing
The whole thing was just written so beautifully, and it's awesome.
:] |
souverian.
Demolition Lover
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 19169 | April 8th, 2009 at 07:52pm thank you so much =]
Fool's Paradise
Fantastical dreams disappear
As numbered tallies and birthday candles,
Tower themselves to the cherubs in our atmospheric pasts

When will we all lose track of their chanting chalices,
That pour a parade of eras every decade we grow?
I'll drift on a raft away from these iron cities,
Into the darkest arms of the goddess Nyx
To run away from aging blunders,
Chased through the world by the calling of nymphs
But the reversal of time is infinite in wisdom,
So i'll tightly tuck my eyes beneath an illogical canvas.
I will land myself in pirate terrains,
Nestled as the queen of the kings
To be thrust upon sapphire hills,
And rolled between the dunes
Of Judean Deserts and Judean tunes
Singing myself through the canopy
Of Malaysian forests and tropical monsoons.
They will never grasp these joys away
They will never drench my beard in grey
I refuse, I detest the status that is quo,
That which poisons the livelihood of imaginations
To never ever flourish and grow.
I will escape indigenous tribes,
And refuse helpful hands of flying Phoenix brides
I will not revel in the cavernous depths of reality
Of wrinkles and fading faces.
My childhood delusions will asphyxiate mortality
And leave me a drunkard in bliss.
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the desperate ranks.
Always Born a Crime
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 6712 | April 19th, 2009 at 01:45pm Wow. Just... wow. I usually never visit the poetry forum - though there isn't an actual reason why - but today, by chance, I did, and I stumbled upon this thread. I just wanted to tell you that you're an amazing poet. You have an awe-inspiring range of vocabulary, but you don't over-embellish every line so it's nearly suffocating... somehow it all fits brilliantly.
Now it really makes me want to put some of my own poetry in here... though it isn't nearly as good as yours.  It also makes me wonder why there aren't more comments here.
Though, your talent really makes me wonder what your age is...  |
souverian.
Demolition Lover
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 19169 | April 21st, 2009 at 06:47pm Wow, thank you so much for the comment. It really made my day. Seriously.
And you should definitely put your poems up. There is no harm in sharing your work, and it helps to improve writing abilities when people comment.
Thanks again for your kind words. I'm 15 by the way =] |
the desperate ranks.
Always Born a Crime
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 6712 | April 26th, 2009 at 06:28pm You're very, very welcome. I'm thinking of posting my stuff, but it probably won't be very soon.
And you're 15? Holy... I'm really envious. That's extraordinary. |
souverian.
Demolition Lover
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 19169 | ^ ah, not at all xD But thank you =]
Tragedy of the Bazaar.
We are melodically adrift within beating drums,
Bangs of war, drowning birds and ambiance hums
Peaceful pastimes, ancient cities of my memory,
When tribes left to dance by the cry of drums,
Warn of war drowning clowns and senseless hums
The remains of circus trinkets left behind,
The remains of love forgotten in our minds.
I am my mother's only one,
A puppeteer and master bred,
To please the cosmos and the beasts
I am my mother's only misery,
When my stringed dolls dance to mother peace,
Through noble forests who know no sides,
Lost forests blind to battles and tides,
Of an oracle circus and her scaled dragon hides.
No one is the ex-soldier of a torn world
No one remains of sinful circus lives
When elephants trample over souls
And wade in the pool of Bethesda,
We tread and tread to beats and beats
Through the narrow gates of God.
War drown the painted clowns,
And my heart was to joyfully explode
War drowned herself to death,
My ex-soldier heart destroyed. |
souverian.
Demolition Lover
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 19169 | May 17th, 2009 at 05:36pm The Brothels of Armageddon.
I am in burial grounds as I lay in comfort of her chest,
Discarded my virtuous past in the traps of her breast
The fire of her soothing voice, grappled man in a lovers nest
When the winds of her voice cry "my liege, my liege,"
She is the beast with the satinet heart that siege.
Possessed, the beasts leaves loving men,
To engulf in a sea of lust crying "Amen, Amen."
Her love is a vile heavenly aura,
Her heart, a box of Pandora
Skews out evil hands that dwindle my thoughts,
To all spiraling into a ditch of distraught
I am dead with the elixir of love,
As she dances me in her porcelain glove.
The rivers flooded with ears cut off,
By the gold lathered beast of lust
She has even killed the high priest,
Made fools of men as her heavenly feast
By the gold lathered beast of lust. |
souverian.
Demolition Lover
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 19169 | June 16th, 2009 at 07:19pm Subtle is Life
Soulless sparrows of spring
Tangled the tyrant's teachings
Paused, he, to praise
A life long lived unknown.
Other-worldly waters
Cleansed the king's cold soul
Cried, he, to struggle
A life long lived unknown.
Stallions of the sword
White horses of the Lord
Emptied the emperor's word
In hellfire
In hellfire
Tried, he, to remember
His life long lived unknown. |
souverian.
Demolition Lover
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 19169 | September 4th, 2009 at 07:05pm The Literature of Georgia Gray- I wrote this quickly within a few minutes, so it's subject to change as I feel it's not written that well. Comments would be nice.
My novella is prose for the tongue tied lover,
Who emancipate their wind torn voice,
For sullen silence of apocrypha
Georgia, their crevasse for undying silence.
The pages lost like Atlantis,
The phrases forgotten like God
Their past discarded for futures,
Promising ill fate but liberty
Promising love but no harmony.
My novella is a promise so sultry
Prose for the Medieval poor,
Posing a promise that time tore.
This literature veers into realms,
As gravity toils and overwhelms
My heart to disperse and emerge,
Like the gray charcoaled mountains that splurge
In the backdrop of Georgia's gray woods.
But the lovers, pupils tightly tied,
Could not read as they stood
In the backdrop of Georgia's gray woods. |
DeWitt.
Crash Queen
Age: 31
Gender: -
Posts: 31119 | September 4th, 2009 at 08:24pm You have such a beautiful way with words, and I find myself envious.
Beautiful work here. |
souverian.
Demolition Lover
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 19169 | September 7th, 2009 at 06:45pm Thank you for the kind words Maria ; ) |
SicTransitGloria
Bleeding on the Floor
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 1150 | September 13th, 2009 at 08:28am Just to say, how did I never discover you before? Your poetry is beautiful. I've only read the first four, but I'm going to keep reading, when I have the time  you've got a really good collection on here as well. You ever thought about publishing them?
Please keep adding more, and bloody well done so far 
x |
souverian.
Demolition Lover
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 19169 | December 21st, 2009 at 02:58pm From Where I Came
The long lost ships of long lost sailors nestle their beaten minds,
Between the finite grains of the desolate sea floor
And as I cry to them from where I stand,
Their restless souls surface to my land.
From where they lie, there is no shedding of blood,
There is no need for Christ's redemption in a sinless sea.
There are no battleships set sail for war,
Their lives are not cut short by such mindless gore.
For the fluorescent eels are their navigating stars,
And the tide is their captain, carrying them through
From Capricorn to Cancer and beyond and beyond.
With their significant others, distant lovers they are entwined
Faint silhouettes, languid with droopiness in the ethereal sea
We placed our souls in the hands of the wind
Through the tides and currents beneath Dover Hill
And there we lay beneath the sea
To lose our minds and to be eminently free
For the coral reefs are my neon towers
Looming like lunar eclipses over the bottomless sea
My spirit descended from where it came
To see my corpse sinking with the stones
Sinking and sinking till it could sink no more
And the ocean became my home
And the sailors became my hope
And the creatures became my comfort
The comfort and solace of my mother's womb,
From where I came. |
MCRmusicmonster
Really Not Okay
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 612 | December 21st, 2009 at 09:46pm OMG, you are an AMAZING poet. I could not stop reading. Keep up the awasome work. I was just really blown away when I read the post that said you were only 15. You write WAY beyond your age my friend. WAY beyond your age.  |
misa misa.
Shotgun Sinner
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8241 | December 24th, 2009 at 12:35am wow, these are really good.
I really love your style, you have a very unique voice that really comes through in your writing.
i can't believe i have never noticed your thread on the board before.
You have some beautiful imagery:
With their significant others, distant lovers they are entwined
Faint silhouettes, languid with droopiness in the ethereal sea
lovely.
I can't wait to hear more from you. |
souverian.
Demolition Lover
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 19169 | January 9th, 2010 at 12:48pm Thanks for the feedback! I really appreciate the comments. |
