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Everything We've Ever Been.

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teen spirit.
Crash Queen
teen spirit.
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 30661
February 26th, 2009 at 12:00am
so i thought i'd finally post in here.
so i'll try and upate this thread with my poems as often as possible.
i'm just starting out, but i'd love comments.
<3

anyway, this first poem is probably my first complete poem. i'm pretty much happy with it, except that i of course, need to give it a structure, which i will later do.


Lessons in Existing
You've told me that you're sick of living
A message that rocks me to my core
And I speak in whispers of how much you mean

After nightmares of your final breath breaking the silence
I awake and rejoice that you still exist

"I love you."
I'll fight to keep you here
Instead of fading into a fragment of my past tense
I can't think of the words to keep you living
I never was much of a poet
I'm scared of all you've become
'Cause that's nothing
"I need you."

This building is burning down fast
We'll toss away the ashes and build a new one
An image of the first with stronger foundations
And a fresh coat of paint

I have to be all you need
'Cause I'm all you have.





Hope you liked, yeah the name sucks. D : I'll change it when I think of a better one.
Your Ghost.
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Your Ghost.
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 440
February 26th, 2009 at 05:53pm
thats a really nice poem, and i like the title. Its greatt Very Happy
sherlock!
Crash Queen
sherlock!
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 30830
February 28th, 2009 at 01:24am
Viv, this poem's absolutely amazing.
I really love this line:
"I'll fight to keep you here
Instead of fading into a fragment of my past tense
I can't think of the words to keep you living."

it's amazing, and it's uplifting.
People who have lost hope should definitely read this work of art.
*not worthy*
it's amazin, bby. (: <3
teen spirit.
Crash Queen
teen spirit.
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 30661
September 3rd, 2009 at 07:37pm
woww i really don't like that first poem anymore. but i guess that means i've improved? xD
i haven't updated in so long. D:

this is a really new one, and there's no timing element or structure at all, and yes it's really short, but i'm gonna perfect it over time. xD







dearest liar you.
you should live life tonight like it's your last night on earth,
really live life cause you'll forget it all tomorrow
as the alcohol burns at the back of your throat,
will it burn all the lies that you sold us?

you'll try and get lost in the mass of bodies swaying
the buzzing eats away at the night and the colors rush together
you'll communicate by mouthing words and edging closer,
you're desperately desired here.

you won't erase the words that are written on your veins with a rush of alcohol to soak them clean
is our forgiveness pumping through the speakers now?

teen spirit.
Crash Queen
teen spirit.
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 30661
September 6th, 2009 at 08:33am
new one. still not completely done with the one before this.

you can be.
comic books and alley fights, smoking guns and lonely nights
3 steps from the bigtime, 1 step from the breakdown
this is everything you need to be.
but can you hear me calling?

sit back and watch the stars through broken windows
keep close to your heart a photograph,
of the hometown you'll never return to.

you were a gleaming star,
but the world you loved so well has tarnished your shine
every dose of powder clears away a "could've been",
every drink another notch in your memories
old friendships are clouding over now
oh, i could have made you well.

you made not a sound as you crept out of love,
carelessness brought you your silence
for that brief moment you wore death so well.

you'll write about your near-death nights,
so they'll all know but they won't understand
they can't fill the shoes you broke down in.