Everything We've Ever Been.
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teen spirit. Crash Queen Age: 30 Gender: Female Posts: 30661 | so i'll try and upate this thread with my poems as often as possible. i'm just starting out, but i'd love comments. <3 anyway, this first poem is probably my first complete poem. i'm pretty much happy with it, except that i of course, need to give it a structure, which i will later do. Lessons in Existing You've told me that you're sick of living A message that rocks me to my core And I speak in whispers of how much you mean After nightmares of your final breath breaking the silence I awake and rejoice that you still exist "I love you." I'll fight to keep you here Instead of fading into a fragment of my past tense I can't think of the words to keep you living I never was much of a poet I'm scared of all you've become 'Cause that's nothing "I need you." This building is burning down fast We'll toss away the ashes and build a new one An image of the first with stronger foundations And a fresh coat of paint I have to be all you need 'Cause I'm all you have. Hope you liked, yeah the name sucks. D : I'll change it when I think of a better one. |
Your Ghost. Thinking Happy Thoughts Age: 28 Gender: Female Posts: 440 | thats a really nice poem, and i like the title. Its greatt |
sherlock! Crash Queen Age: 30 Gender: Female Posts: 30830 | Viv, this poem's absolutely amazing. I really love this line: "I'll fight to keep you here Instead of fading into a fragment of my past tense I can't think of the words to keep you living." it's amazing, and it's uplifting. People who have lost hope should definitely read this work of art. *not worthy* it's amazin, bby. (: <3 |
teen spirit. Crash Queen Age: 30 Gender: Female Posts: 30661 | woww i really don't like that first poem anymore. but i guess that means i've improved? xD i haven't updated in so long. D: this is a really new one, and there's no timing element or structure at all, and yes it's really short, but i'm gonna perfect it over time. xD dearest liar you. you should live life tonight like it's your last night on earth, really live life cause you'll forget it all tomorrow as the alcohol burns at the back of your throat, will it burn all the lies that you sold us? you'll try and get lost in the mass of bodies swaying the buzzing eats away at the night and the colors rush together you'll communicate by mouthing words and edging closer, you're desperately desired here. you won't erase the words that are written on your veins with a rush of alcohol to soak them clean is our forgiveness pumping through the speakers now? |
teen spirit. Crash Queen Age: 30 Gender: Female Posts: 30661 | new one. still not completely done with the one before this. you can be. comic books and alley fights, smoking guns and lonely nights 3 steps from the bigtime, 1 step from the breakdown this is everything you need to be. but can you hear me calling? sit back and watch the stars through broken windows keep close to your heart a photograph, of the hometown you'll never return to. you were a gleaming star, but the world you loved so well has tarnished your shine every dose of powder clears away a "could've been", every drink another notch in your memories old friendships are clouding over now oh, i could have made you well. you made not a sound as you crept out of love, carelessness brought you your silence for that brief moment you wore death so well. you'll write about your near-death nights, so they'll all know but they won't understand they can't fill the shoes you broke down in. |
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