Joany's Little Poem Vortex.
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Joan Greenwood Killjoy ![]() Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 78 | The light is fading fast and the world looks to the sky, singing my, oh my. White flakes cascade and whirl on the ground. They have never seen snow before. What amnesia affects us all! Yet I see you there, permanently looking at the sky, singing "My God, save me" through the cold ground and grass and the dead leaves left rotting in the shallows. What a devastation, what a weary world that looks towards the sky, screaming "Oh my!". You are seventy nine but your heart is silent. Pulmonary embolisms. All the doctors are whores, looking at the sky thinking why can't I save them all? All the doctors are whores, looking at the sky thinking "Why can't I save them all?" As the light fades fast, as the night breaks through. We are so accustomed to being blinded by white that when night appears, we must look at the sky thinking "My, oh my what is this? The Abyss? But you have been eradicated Bottled and distilled by our many mills!" And then they look to the sky and see why oh why they are wrong. |
Joan Greenwood Killjoy ![]() Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 78 | White Water. The water was turbid. Hardly water at all anymore, more of a dirty dish soup than the washing up. What a disgrace. The reek spoke against the walls, reaching every corner, every syllable Misplaced. What would you have made of me, washing my hands in this filth, this waste, this basin? Where would your white horse collapse and let you fall to Earth as I catapult into the sky. Far away, where dimensions meet to drink that turbid white water that you wanted me to clean dishes in where it was only fit for inhuman consumption. |
Joan Greenwood Killjoy ![]() Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 78 | The Yellows of the Dark The harem tale is not as bittersweet as the whore itself, deftly weaving that fantasy world in dirty, black silk sheets, covering herself in the darkness. How fragile it is, the hymen life she leads! How small indeed it was and is and will be. The lipstick is too bright a red, it's not the enhancement of her own lips, it’s the projection of wax, cold and lifelike. "Are you a widow?" the wind howls as it bares her pale skin under the yellow yellow sulphur lights. "A mother of an unborn son?" callous voices seep though the anxious singing. I can see her clutching at the seams of her satin dress. Frictionless in the cold and the rain. Fictionless as a spelling mistake. What would she make of my life and it's pathetic voyeurism dressed as an intelligent yet morbid curiosity? Of the pale walls of no particular shade. Of the blue eyes and yellow teeth and the peculiar bruises on breasts of shades of a vile and foul nature? I am no superior and neither is she. We are one against the wind, separated by an unyielding glass shield. |
Joan Greenwood Killjoy ![]() Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 78 | Fear. I cannot contemplate the Apocalypse without some minor side effects of the mind. This psychiatry is not completely off-the-wall or induced by chemical compounds of varying degrees. I can see her, the angel that the Priory spoke of. The end is nigh for so long in my consciousness I feel it trapezing from the rooftops. Fly...fly! Fie, my lord, fie! Fear her! The angel! She is the homeless girl on the street who doesn't understand geometry. What a pity. I need some mathematical equations to understand, to understand your common, underhand wrestling with angels. |
The Original Bob. Demolition Lover ![]() Age: 28 Gender: Female Posts: 16672 | Joan Greenwood: I love the way you repeat certain phrases in this one, like "Oh my", and the general idea of forboding i got from it made me shudder. I love the imagery, and the loss of hope that i got from it. All the doctors are whores, looking at the sky thinking why can't I save them all? All the doctors are whores, looking at the sky thinking "Why can't I save them all?" For me this was the best phrase, and the way you repeated it stuck the feeling in my mind. |
The Original Bob. Demolition Lover ![]() Age: 28 Gender: Female Posts: 16672 | Joan Greenwood: This one's really good, the way you played with the lines and the spacing made it interesting and caught my attention making me reread it several times. The pauses you put in are in perfect spots. You're a really good poet. |
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