My poem thingys

Its about my wreck...=(

Final Thoughts
If I were to die today, my life would not be okay
I have friends Id leave behind, friends like them are impossible to find
Id have issues left unsolved, and personal battles left unresolved

I know exactly where Id be, a place where I can finally be free
But what about my friends and family, what would their lives look like without me?
And all the people Ive let go, Ive never felt so low

I opened my eyes to see, glass and blood everywhere; how can this be?
I wonder how Im still alive, its a miracle Im still alive
I turn to see my dad, he looked so scared; I knew this was bad

I heard screaming and saw their fear, is this it; will we lose her here?
So much blood I lost that day, I went into shock; whyd it have to be this way?
That car shouldve been my grave, but the angels chose me to save

Even though I couldnt see, I knew all the worry was about me
I was dragged across the shattered glass, oh how slow time did pass
Blood and glass stained my face, tangled in my hair; the image I want to erase

I can still hear my parents cry, and Im thinking why oh why?
The first time I saw my face, split wide open; how can I still be in this place?
Dark red was all I saw, dripping slowly down; stopping at my jaw

As scared as I was I wouldnt show, still to this day I do not know
Mom held my hand as they fixed my face, thirty-one stitches; I hated that place
Blood ran into my eye, I tried so hard not to cry

Then soon people came in to pray over me, I wished I could see
On the way home I began to think, how beautiful the sky looked in pink
To this day when I see the scar, I think of how I shouldve died in that car

Well thanks

This is amazing. It actually made me cry.

wow. i love the rhyming scheme and also the raw emotion!

xD

That is a awesome poem, so much emotion pu into the words! Because I think you are awesome at writing poems would you mind looking at my Topic? I am asking people to write the next line to this poem, its like a continuos (can't spell) thing. It would mean alot. Thanks x

Fail
I frgot to put the name of the topic! It is Poetry, It's Simple.

Thanks again xx

<3 Okay

Great work on this poem.
Full of emotion and the structure's clean.

Well done. ^_^

Tanks

wow, that's like really awesome. you have some extreme talent.

Well ty

Its about my ex

You took everything that was important to me
And you threw it all away
And all becaused I loved you
Is the only reason why I stayed

You took my youth and my laugh
You took my freedom as well
And now all I have left
I see as nothing less than how much I fail

You're gonna be married soon
That I realy dont understand
I dont get why youre running away
Im hope you dont come running to me, when you crash land

Dont ever think ill forget you
You've made me stronger
Even though you abused me, all I ask
Is that you hold on a little longer.

My friend Travis wrote it about me


"I Admit"
For i am in love,
With a wounderful gal,
Yes you are my dove,
And admit this i shall.
Your eyes glecine in the light,
A hypnotic deep blue,
Its a beautiful sight,
And this is true.
Your sweet smooth skin,
It may be pail,
But of course its a ten,
And that will never fail.
Your hair goes on forever,
It blows in the winds,
To forget it i could never,
Your beauty never ends.
To prove our love,
We should commit,
You are my dove,
And this i do admit!

Still Here To Me
(this is what I have so far, it isnt done)

You are still here to me
I look up at the sky and see
You smiling down upon me
You are still here to me

You are still here to me
Bullets don’t mean a thing to me
Why can’t they see what I see
You are still here to me

You are still here to me
Shot to death because you had to be
Your bloody hands held the key
You are still here to me

You are still here to me
Why did you have to flee
I saw the side no one else could see
You are still here to me

Still in my heart
Your soul is alive and dancing
Still in my heart
I see us in the living room prancing

You are still here to me
But you’re gruesome death is all I see
You were a great part of the family
You are still here to me


R.I.,P Jeremy.....i love you : (