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Wiky's `Art` ;)

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SweetMe
Killjoy
SweetMe
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 9
March 7th, 2010 at 01:28pm
I don't care if I die...
Guess why...
I do care if We both die...
Guess why...
I don`t care if we both die
Guess why...
I care to be with you,
I care if you care too...
I hope you care if I die,
Guess why?....

Please tell me what you think i was gonna send it to a boy i like, and i dunno if i should. ;x thank you Smile Mr. Green
MyChemicalBlack
Salute You in Your Grave
MyChemicalBlack
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 2351
March 9th, 2010 at 06:55pm
Seems like you could put a tune to it and make it "song-like".
If that makes sense. Smiley

Interesting format, but heck, it's pretty decent.
Just watch out for the multiple use of "guess why", it kind of interrupts the flow just a little bit, in my opinion. Smile
SweetMe
Killjoy
SweetMe
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 9
March 12th, 2010 at 04:54am
The thing is its supossed to repat the guess why ;D
TrustMe_ImNotOkay
Killjoy
TrustMe_ImNotOkay
Age: -
Gender: Female
Posts: 7
March 28th, 2010 at 01:38pm
Wow! I Really Liked It:] Good Job!
brandleys;
Death Defying
brandleys;
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 186298
March 30th, 2010 at 11:30pm
i like how it's repetitive. it's good.