SweetMe Killjoy
Age: 28 Gender: Female Posts: 9 | March 7th, 2010 at 01:28pm
I don't care if I die...
Guess why...
I do care if We both die...
Guess why...
I don`t care if we both die
Guess why...
I care to be with you,
I care if you care too...
I hope you care if I die,
Guess why?....
Please tell me what you think i was gonna send it to a boy i like, and i dunno if i should. ;x thank you |
MyChemicalBlack Salute You in Your Grave
Age: - Gender: - Posts: 2351 | March 9th, 2010 at 06:55pm Seems like you could put a tune to it and make it "song-like".
If that makes sense.
Interesting format, but heck, it's pretty decent.
Just watch out for the multiple use of "guess why", it kind of interrupts the flow just a little bit, in my opinion. |
SweetMe Killjoy
Age: 28 Gender: Female Posts: 9 | March 12th, 2010 at 04:54am The thing is its supossed to repat the guess why ;D |
TrustMe_ImNotOkay Killjoy
Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 7 | March 28th, 2010 at 01:38pm Wow! I Really Liked It:] Good Job! |
brandleys; Death Defying
Age: 28 Gender: Female Posts: 186298 | March 30th, 2010 at 11:30pm i like how it's repetitive. it's good. |