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Pistol_GeeBucks Joining The Black Parade Age: - Gender: - Posts: 200	December 6th, 2008 at 04:02pm My band, My Chicago have only just starting writing songs, so I thought I'd put some of my lyric ideas here so I could get some feedback. Like The Wings Of A Humming Bird Verse I don't know how to talk to you Will you ever know? The jealousy tears us all apart Like the beast that is inside Like the fire in your eyes Pre-chorus Please don't Leave me alone this time I know you don't mean to be so cold But it still hurts me so bad Still hits me so hard Chorus I can't Lie to you this time I think I'm losing faith in you Oh, won't you look my way Verse 2 If you were me you'd feel the same So humble to your smile You're just that flicker of desire That I just can't let go Oh, won't you ever know? Pre-chorus Please don't Leave me alone this time I know you don't mean to be so cold But it still hurts me so bad Still hits me so hard Chorus I can't Lie to you this time I think I'm losing faith in you Oh, won't you look my way Bridge And our hearts will beat like Our hearts are Beating like the wings of a Humming bird Chorus I can't Lie to you this time I think I'm losing faith in you Oh, won't you look my way I think I'm losing... A lot of this needs work, which is why I put it up here
MyChemicalBlack Salute You in Your Grave Age: - Gender: - Posts: 2351	December 6th, 2008 at 05:35pm I like the theme of the song. Out of curiousity, what type of music is going with this? Ex.) Slow, Fast, melodic, etc. Otherwise I've got no beef with this. xD
Pistol_GeeBucks Joining The Black Parade Age: - Gender: - Posts: 200	December 6th, 2008 at 05:48pm ^ Thanks for the comment =) I'm not really sure about the music yet. I play guitar, and I come up with loads of riffs, I just never know which lyrics to fit them to. I think our band style is gonna be leaning towards Paramore, because everything we write seems to be that way. So I guess it'll be quite upbeat, I can't see it being slow.
Pistol_GeeBucks Joining The Black Parade Age: - Gender: - Posts: 200	December 6th, 2008 at 06:12pm Untitled.....and unfinished Verse The wire wrapped around my neck Gets tighter every day They've all stabbed you in the back Oh, that so so tragic way Is this what we will become Hit bitter heights of low Can't you see what we've become? Whoa-oh-oh Chorus I'm scared to forget you Deluded as I am I'm scared to forget you Please don't let me go Verse 2 What are we supposed to see When everyone's so blind? Who are you supposed to be? 'Cause I can't see your mind And were we all meant to burn Burn so long ago Are we all going to burn? Whoa-oh-oh Chorus I'm scared to forget you Deluded as I am I'm scared to forget you Please don't let me go I'm not sure about this. I wrote the verses as a separate song to the chorus but decided to put them together. They're about the same story, but I'm not sure if it fits. =/
fabulous killjoy. Moderator Age: 31 Gender: Female Posts: 46256	December 6th, 2008 at 07:07pm If these are lyrics, they belong here, not in the poetry section.

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