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Ravi's poems

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ReadyFreddie.
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ReadyFreddie.
Age: 28
Gender: Male
Posts: 25545
June 16th, 2008 at 09:43am
Cherokee:
You Just Hate Me Because I've Got Your Girl [You're not a mother; you're a friend]

I really enjoyed reading this one, though I got lost a bit, I got back on track vey easily.
Really smooth flow of ideas, I like it so much, I dont' know but the whole Blood seeping from brains, and suicide, and attacks, and hospital beds. You showed them in the real way, the one that actually holds a true meaning.

Thanks, Cherokee!
Yeah- the poem topic is pretty wierd. I'll probably reveal its true meaning one day [Though the title should really explain who it's for, and the content kinda explains what it's about]
Thanks for reading!
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ReadyFreddie.
Bulletproof Heart
ReadyFreddie.
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Gender: Male
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June 17th, 2008 at 09:35am
Harare
[AKA- Daddy, please come home]

Daddy didn't come home last night,
I stayed awake all night and cried,
I fear that he won't return again,
I fear that he has died.

The smell of burning flesh haunts the streets,
The stench makes me grimace and squirm,
I saw a man being burned alive,
His ash lays on the ground.

No-one's not gonna help us now,
No-one else really cares,
We've got a dictator; who's slowly killing us all,
There's no answer to our prayers.

There's only one person who could help,
But he's been detained, too,
He's been beaten and bruised like the rest of us,
I fear he won't succeed.

Our dictator's denied us of food and water,
He's slowly pounding us into the ground,
Daddy, my father, please come home,
I'm begging you: Please be found.
The Original Bob.
Demolition Lover
The Original Bob.
Age: 25
Gender: Female
Posts: 16672
June 17th, 2008 at 09:58am
Ravi, you're awesome!!!! I miss talking to you. See you later. Keep writing!!! *iz makings no sense.*
ReadyFreddie.
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ReadyFreddie.
Age: 28
Gender: Male
Posts: 25545
June 17th, 2008 at 06:25pm
Bob.:
Ravi, you're awesome!!!! I miss talking to you. See you later. Keep writing!!! *iz makings no sense.*

THanks Smile
I miss talking to you too hug
ReadyFreddie.
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ReadyFreddie.
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Gender: Male
Posts: 25545
June 18th, 2008 at 05:09am
To you it's rough sex; to me it's reminding you of all your bulls***
[Aka- I'll spank you hard; whip you harder- but I'll never let you forget]

You moan and squeal,
Not content with the norm,
You don't want normal intercourse,
You want a riotous storm.

Skin on skin aint good enough,
Sliding in and out won't do,
You want beatings, bruises, screams and shouts,
You know this is true.

Pound you till your legs go numb,
Always keep watching you come,
To me every night for your sensation,
Encourage every ounce of your elation,
Feel your nails dig into my skin,
This treatment does not chagrin,
For it's a punishment- but you have done no wrong,
A punishment that's so hard and long,
And results in cries and screams, moans,
My name entertwined with your emphatic groans,
But you know the state I get in,
Just to hurt my baby so,
I've gotta dredge up all the shit,
And all the hatred itself grows.

You do know,
That the pleasure you desire,
Is not my cup of tea,
But it sets you on fire.

So I do it,
just to put a smile on your face,
Hear you scream my name,
Lets pick up the pace.

I've gotta talk dirty,
Rub your face in the mud,
Spank you and hurt you just to let,
All the lovejuice flood.

But it kills me inside,
To hurt my girl,
Even though she's happy,
She's still my world.

Although I love it when she calls my name,
I love it when she sparks a flame,
But what happened at the end of the night,
Wasn't so pretty coz we both came,
To a stalemate in an emotional game,
You cried and cried, laid me the blame,
But it's your fetish, not mine,
Maybe it's neither of ours crime,
You got scared when I started talking dirt,
Trying to be your sexual flirt,
The mindset I got in spiraled out of control,
All the shit you did kicked into action and rolled,
And I couldn't stop myself from calling you names,
Squeezing and pounding till you came,
To a conclusion that we both needed to ease,
and calm our waters; hold a Bee-Dee-Ess-Emm freeze.


I'm sorry,
for all that I had done,
I'm sorry I couldn't,
Make you come,
To a safe conclusion, and harder, too.
Asiah Scott
Joining The Black Parade
Asiah Scott
Age: 27
Gender: Female
Posts: 194
June 19th, 2008 at 03:55am
Awesome poems... I love all fo them. Some are simple yet elegant and the reader is quickly captivated. I love the song "schizophrenia"...the idea is pretty cool! And the coke one is true. lol xD
ReadyFreddie.
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ReadyFreddie.
Age: 28
Gender: Male
Posts: 25545
June 19th, 2008 at 09:56am
Thanks, Daniella! hug
HFH have taken Schizophrenia, so It'd be interesting to see where we take the song etc.
Thanks for the comments! They really mean alot to me.
Asiah Scott
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Asiah Scott
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Gender: Female
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June 19th, 2008 at 10:54am
yeah I did see it. Cant wait to hear it..! lol
Best of luck with that. If you need help in other bands, I'd be there. xD
ReadyFreddie.
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ReadyFreddie.
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Gender: Male
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June 19th, 2008 at 11:22am
Asiah Scott:
yeah I did see it. Cant wait to hear it..! lol
Best of luck with that. If you need help in other bands, I'd be there. xD

Thanks!
I'm currently playing in all of them rolling on floor
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ReadyFreddie.
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ReadyFreddie.
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July 2nd, 2008 at 01:57pm
I've Only Known You For Sixty Hours, And I'll Tear At The Seams If I'm Not By Your Side
[Aka: Vanilla, Vanella, Whatever Your Name Is- I Shouldn't Miss You So Much]
[For Nell]

Dear Vanilla,
It's only been three days,
But somehow I've gone around,
And planned my whole life away,
But the surprising thing,
And the unexpected part,
Was that you factored in,
Not the girl that's in my heart,
Yes, I am really ashamed,
I shouldn't feel this way at all,
But what d'you want me to do?
I'm speaking to a brick wall.

You don't like me back,
You'd rather see me die,
Or at least just move away,
Quit making your life awry.

Kay, baby, I don't know what the hell to do,
I'm being torn between four thousand miles,
And a girl that's totally new.

My heads in a vice,
I'm struggling to get free,
This long distance bullshit,
Has taken it's toll on me,
But Vanilla doesn't like me,
So I guess that we are safe,
I'm sorry that I'm human,
Sorry you got the strafe,
Coz I feel like I'm single,
I've got no-one to hold,
No-one to talk to,
No-one that is bold.

But I guess I'll go on,
Coz it's suddenly clear to me,
That something's better than nothing,
Yours Sincerely, Ravi.
ReadyFreddie.
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ReadyFreddie.
Age: 28
Gender: Male
Posts: 25545
August 6th, 2008 at 05:42pm
[song] "Hangman"

-v1-
Call yourself a lawyer,
Just a two bit friend on the hunt for smiles,
Been standing on the corner,
Watching you for a while

-INTERLUDE-

You're crawling under my skin,
Go deep enough and you'll draw blood,
The jury's spoken...

-CHORUS-
Take your problems,
Go back home,
Ride away from this town,
Look me in the eye and tell,
DON'T PLAY INNOCENT.

-v2-
Like a bull; gonna charge you,
Just because you're flashing red,
Never thought you'd be that way [that way]
Never thought you'd play that game,
I guess all people change,
's always gonna be the same.

-GANG VOCAL-
You're looking out for number one now,
Looking out for number one,
You're looking out for number one now,
Looking out for number one.

-CHORUS-
Take your problems,
Go back home,
Ride away from this town,
Look me in the eye and tell,
DON'T PLAY INNOCENT.

-v3-
You said you lost respect,
You lost full faith in my coz,
I was never your pet,
You can bet that I never will be.
You take this to your grave,
And I'll take this to mine,
WALK ON the other side of the street,
And we will be just fine now.

-INTERLUDE-

-CHORUS-
Take your problems,
Go back home,
Ride away from this town,
Look me in the eye and tell,
DON'T PLAY INNOCENT.

Take your problems,
Go back home,
Ride away from this town,
Look me in the eye and tell,
DON'T PLAY INNOCENT.
The Original Bob.
Demolition Lover
The Original Bob.
Age: 25
Gender: Female
Posts: 16672
August 11th, 2008 at 11:17am
Nice. That was pretty awesome, the Hangman song. I loved it!!
ReadyFreddie.
Bulletproof Heart
ReadyFreddie.
Age: 28
Gender: Male
Posts: 25545
August 11th, 2008 at 07:18pm
Thanks, Sarah!
Smile

I'm posting another song soon. I'm gonna need all of your help with it. All will be revealed!
ReadyFreddie.
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ReadyFreddie.
Age: 28
Gender: Male
Posts: 25545
August 11th, 2008 at 07:28pm
Okay, guys. I'mma need your help with this one. I need a name for it. I couldn't get anything solid, and Kay didn't get anything either. It's quite a slow song; influenced alot by "Yule Shoot Your Eye Out". My favourite will get chosen as the title, and of course, the winner'll get credited.

UNNAMED.

It's summer 0-7,
Your eyes pass mine in a virtual hall,
I could feel a spark,
But now were igniting,
Two souls just left in the dark.


Three cheers for suicide,
Three cheers for homicide,
Just give me a day when you are mine


Just a night alone without your insecurities,
Just a night alone without one of your cats,
Just a night alone without father or ma,
I'd do just anything to bring you back


You've got
Fifteen Stones of hell in your heart,
And it's not gonna get lighter no`
It's gonna push all the tears and open the fears,
and it won't ever let go

three cheers for the Atlantic
romantic/ sycophantic,
Just give me a day when you are mine

Just a night alone without your insecurities,
Just a night alone without one of your cats,
Just a night alone without father or ma,
I'd do just anything to bring you back

Almost a year and we're falling apart,
We're tearing at the seams right now.
You blame it on yourself and secretly I do too,
But being diplomatic means I've gotta take a bow

This awkward silence
is taking over
but I can't do this alone

Just a night alone without your insecurities,
Just a night alone without one of your cats,
Just a night alone without father or ma,
I'd do just anything to bring you back

INTERLUDE

We're burnt and bruised,
Easily amused,
But we aren't giving up just yet.
Or are we scared,
that we can't go back;
we have no safety net

Just know this, then,
I love you more then,
You will ever know.

Just a night alone without your insecurities,
Just a night alone without one of your cats,
Just a night alone without father or ma,
I'd do just anything to bring you back
The Original Bob.
Demolition Lover
The Original Bob.
Age: 25
Gender: Female
Posts: 16672
August 19th, 2008 at 12:21pm
three cheers for the Atlantic
romantic/ sycophantic,
Just give me a day when you are mine


My favourite verse. This one is probably my favourite song you've written. I really like it. I could hear it in my head as I read it.
ReadyFreddie.
Bulletproof Heart
ReadyFreddie.
Age: 28
Gender: Male
Posts: 25545
January 24th, 2009 at 06:14am
His Final Poem

He surveys her as she sleeps,
Her beauty holds him hostage,
His wishes worm their way up to his lips,
He can't just stand and stare.

"Will you dream of me again, my love?
I do so much miss it so,
It seems like everyone else is at home there,
But I have nowhere to go"

She writhes and she squirms,
A nightmare taking hold,
He observes her pretty face,
Wishes she'd love him again.

"Come back to me, my beautiful girl,
I need you more than I've ever known,
But you're too far gone, and you can't come back,
Don't be the bird that's flown"

He observes the scars on her beautiful wrists,
And curses himself for not trying;
He wanted to save her and be her man,
But he's only just a boy.

"You're the most beautiful girl in the universe,
And you're too good for me,
I just want you back, the way you were,
I just want us to be happy"

She's motionless as he paws her hand,
He's powerless to bring her back,
He just wants to hold her forever,
Make sure that she's safe and warm.

"You really are perfect,
And you're the one that I love,
But I can't do this, babe,
I need help from above"

He pulls out a blade, tears in his eyes,
He looks at her; asleep in peaceful dreams...