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A Handful Of My Mindless Thoughts

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Euterpe
Killjoy
Euterpe
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 10
July 4th, 2011 at 05:03am
I will be posting my poems here and would love feedback on them. Thanks

And You Don't Care
Life is never as it seems as you walk away from me
Once that happens, nothing is the same
Technically you said forever, but now the ball is rolling
...and you don't care

Nothing matters to you any more
It matters to me though
...and you don't care

What makes me not matter
What makes you break your promises
I cry myself to sleep, wishing that you were close
...and you don't care

Never talk to me again you little bitch
Your excuses have no bearing any more on me
Just be quiet because I can't stand to listen to your crying
Because now you care
Euterpe
Killjoy
Euterpe
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 10
July 28th, 2011 at 06:51pm
Life
Life whispers slowly in the wind as it passes by
Like flying high on the branch of some lowly sigh
Nothing, I mean nothing can break me or make me
Nothing can change the current path I am on
...because it is already set
You make it and break it but in the end you know your life path
jertmccracken
Killjoy
jertmccracken
Age: 28
Gender: Male
Posts: 32
August 28th, 2011 at 12:06am
I like this a lot for the simple fact that I know what your talking about,I'd say to improve put your feelings in more,and Put more statements that need to be thought about. almost like alternate relateable meanings.Please check my work out and leave a comment 2 thanx.
Euterpe
Killjoy
Euterpe
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 10
October 8th, 2011 at 04:27am
Suicidal Beauty
Staring out at the black tar
A meaningless chunk of land – to some
But to you it's where your great last misery will stand
The knife is heavy in your hand
Your life is a great target practice
It's has no mind or meaning

The cool blade touches lightly onto your pale skin
Your head falls back to look at the dark night sky
Your last vision of this world
The stars twinkling at you
As if not want to say goodbye

A shooting star flies by
Like it's waving goodbye
Clouds cover them and two raindrops land on your face
You dig the blade into your skin
The warm crimson blood leaks out
The rain patters on your face, harder and faster
The sky is crying for you

You reach the carotid artery and dig the tip of the blade in
The blood spurts out and you clench your teeth
The real pain has started
You close your eyes as you let yourself be consumed into darkness
For the first time in years a smile appears
You are finally at peace
For yourself at least.