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rockpapersuzi. Always Born a Crime Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 6503	June 26th, 2008 at 11:00pm I may eventually add more than just this to my poetry thread, but for now, you just get Untitled. This is the most recent thing I've written. I wrote this for my boyfriend who lives out of state. =( the highway doesn't know the pain of miles; it only thinks in charts and numbers. how long will it be until I see your smile? a love confined to the weeks of summer. the headlights' glare sprawled over the hilltop. wind caressed the grass, causing it to sway. the cars drive by, never wanting to stop. ...and likewise, darling, we move this way. Criticism? Adulation? Comment.
rockpapersuzi. Always Born a Crime Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 6503	August 8th, 2008 at 03:28am A lot has happened since I posted this. I have since written music for it, added more words, and been dumped. Also, it has a title now. heartquakes.: love song, take one. the highway doesn't know the pain of miles; it only thinks in charts and numbers. how long will it be until I see your smile? a love confined to the weeks of summer. the headlights' glare sprawled over the hilltop. wind caressed the grass, causing it to sway. the cars drive by, never wanting to stop. ...and likewise, darling, we move this way. I want to fall asleep staring at your face and feel the warmth of your arms' embrace. fireworks never looked so good as that night we shared then under the hood.
kings of leon. Always Born a Crime Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 6213	August 8th, 2008 at 10:45am I thought it was beautifully done. You know, love poems can sometimes sounds a bit, false, like, they're hard to make sounds sincere. But this was worded really nicely, I loved it. I thought the ending without the two lines you added was more powerful but I can imagine how the two added lines added to it as a song. Great work : )

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