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Lost thought of a darkened teen

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TheyWontHurtMe
Fabulous Killjoy
TheyWontHurtMe
Age: 27
Gender: Male
Posts: 135
August 17th, 2008 at 03:10pm
Any Comments would be appreciated. Any critisism? Make it constructive, I would love tips on how to improve =]
TheyWontHurtMe
Fabulous Killjoy
TheyWontHurtMe
Age: 27
Gender: Male
Posts: 135
August 17th, 2008 at 03:11pm
I could dye my hair,
And black my eyes.
But still you would see,
Through this disguise.
Am I drinking enough?
Am I smoking enough?
Am I killing myself slowly,
Quickly enough?
I try to be,
What I am wanted to be,
But this hate and anger,
Takes over me.
I try to lie,
But you still see,
I'll sit here now,
And continue to bleed.
TheyWontHurtMe
Fabulous Killjoy
TheyWontHurtMe
Age: 27
Gender: Male
Posts: 135
August 17th, 2008 at 03:12pm
So real these voices that litter my mind,
Myself is the only thing that i wish to find
Some wish to discover riches, and some wish to catch fame,
My anger rears up and i can't hide my shame.

I come to you as a brother, a friend,
And you've done your best to help me mend.
I feel you can help me through whatever may arise,
Together we could do anything as the rest of the world dies.

Without you I don't know what i'd be doing,
Would I still be leading the path I'm pursuing?
Would I be weak or would i be strong?
All i know is you give me strength to carry on.
TheyWontHurtMe
Fabulous Killjoy
TheyWontHurtMe
Age: 27
Gender: Male
Posts: 135
August 17th, 2008 at 03:12pm
The darkness destroys me,
It eats at my soul.
The darkness Destroys me,
As i try to stay whole.
The darkness destroys me,
It tears my world apart,
The darkness destroys me,
And leaves holes in my heart.
The darkness destroys me,
I wish i knew how...
The darkness destroys me,
...To get back to you now.
The darkness destroys me,
I now see the light.
The darkness destroys me,
Its ever so bright...


The light seems to guide me,
It doesn't matter how hard i try.
The light seems to guide me,
I will never know why.
The light seems to guide me,
But now just like back then,
The light has abandonned me,
and it's dark again.
TheyWontHurtMe
Fabulous Killjoy
TheyWontHurtMe
Age: 27
Gender: Male
Posts: 135
August 17th, 2008 at 03:13pm
I sit here, writers block,
And you face apears in my mind.
I write this about you,
But the words i can't find.
I wish i could tell you how i really feel,
It's a shame my love for you i can never reveal.

I've known you for what seems like an eternity,
but i know its just a few weeks in reality.
I never really believed in love at first sight,
But i have since i met you on that cold winters night.
We share something between us that i can't really grasp,
I sincerely hope that this feeling will last.
I'm happy just knowing you, the way we are,
As long as i have you, I'm so near, yet so far,
From where i want to be and where i must go,
When i think about you these words just continue to flow.
I'll end this right now before i go to far,
And leave things between us just the way they are.
TheyWontHurtMe
Fabulous Killjoy
TheyWontHurtMe
Age: 27
Gender: Male
Posts: 135
August 17th, 2008 at 03:13pm
The ringing in my head seems to drown out the world,
Its like my lifes mysteries have all been unfurled.
My problems are gone and so has my pain,
It seems that my demons have all been slain.

The light floods through my window,
And the shadows all burn,
along with all my doubts and concerns.

I love you today, tomorrow, forever,
I hope that our parting will happen never.
Helena Rush.
Awake and Unafraid
Helena Rush.
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 10158
August 17th, 2008 at 05:11pm
Wow..your poetry's amazing,
The Original Bob.
Demolition Lover
The Original Bob.
Age: 25
Gender: Female
Posts: 16672
August 19th, 2008 at 12:58pm
I like "Am I killing myself slowly quickly enough" That's a cool line.
xMcrxNikixHellxKidx
Killjoy
xMcrxNikixHellxKidx
Age: 27
Gender: Female
Posts: 1
August 23rd, 2008 at 07:29pm
wow thats amazing

"I've known you for what seems like an eternity,
but i know its just a few weeks in reality.
I never really believed in love at first sight,
But i have since i met you on that cold winters night.
We share something between us that i can't really grasp,
I sincerely hope that this feeling will last.
I'm happy just knowing you, the way we are,
As long as i have you, I'm so near, yet so far,
From where i want to be and where i must go,
When i think about you these words just continue to flow.
I'll end this right now before i go to far,
And leave things between us just the way they are."

I can really relate to some of those lines
Little Miss Mental
Bleeding on the Floor
Little Miss Mental
Age: 29
Gender: Female
Posts: 1883
August 23rd, 2008 at 09:09pm
Whoooooa. Have you ever though about making an account on Allpoetry? I think you'd do really well, I don't think you need to improve anything, it would be gradual...and what you have here is pure genius!!!! Very Happy
Super.Ninja.1
Killjoy
Super.Ninja.1
Age: 27
Gender: Female
Posts: 42
August 25th, 2008 at 12:15am
They are great.
Wonderful.
barcoded.
Thinking Happy Thoughts
barcoded.
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 551
September 1st, 2008 at 02:58am
you are amazing.Smile