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The Write Frame - Poetry by Nab.

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Always Born a Crime
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July 18th, 2008 at 12:35pm
Nab, I love how you tell a story with your poems - that was a very enjoyable read; you're great at this!
kid from yesterday.
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July 21st, 2008 at 09:19am
Thank you so much guys. <3 -hugs-
kid from yesterday.
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July 24th, 2008 at 12:06am
Not very happy with this, or the stuff I've been coming up with lately. Bleah.

Freezing Point.

I never intended to die;
I meant to only startle you
with the neat and tinted remains of my head.
When I said, ‘In case of an unexpected turn
of events, the bag of Cuban cigars are in the
storeroom drawer’, it was meant in jest and
you weren’t supposed to shed
those tears, instead,
chortle and kiss.

And below the trees,
you sat, letting leaflets of green
warp the smoky vision; holding on to tendrils
of threads I used to wear. (you sat there).
Arms wrapped around your arms, which
you imagine as mine. (then called me).
But you only gasped,
wept harder
at my hello.

I don’t understand the
immovable resolution of the dead
being dead. To be classed as such a cold, unkind
state of health – or being robbed of it – an insult to
my life(less) form at best. I would advise that you
remain well-cared, rather than pain-inflicted for now.
Your wounds will not befriend you
for very long,
or very much.

You can imagine me there;
no-body would stop you from saying
that: this is our twilight.

This is our tree and we are both beneath it.

This is our sky and our ground,
and I am next to you, though only

in your mind. I am next to
your fingers so, shift a-slight to your left
and reach up forwards

and then maybe I won’t remain dead,
only invisible in your eyes though still
evident in your heart.
kid from yesterday.
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July 25th, 2008 at 01:14am
The Committed and The Sinned.

You wanted to start this revolution;

To tick against the grained woodwork
that is your life-on-a-plank. I start.
You next.

My checklist is long with common ailments of
the youth - cynicism at sixteen, irrational
binders to hate more than I should, perpetual
confusion for the sake of confusion. Then the syndromes
stopped. And next I mastered the virtue of silence.

I started. You next.

Your bitter demeanor against the city and hearts,
the stage of worthiness unclamped by cored
insecurity, life-is-but-a-dream phase, I-could-be-
in-love phase, I-wish-I-wasn’t-nothing.

I wish I wasn’t nothing too.

So then we decided to

leave – or maybe, ‘arrive’, as a
tactful way of letting the ones back home win.
We would not hurt those who have ill’d us,
only let it transpire that we are nothing like them.
That was all well,
and in the written plan: difference is key.
Specialty is the extra pot of un-commercial dish.

But we both sported bloody noses at wartime,
and killing became a hobby that we did often.

The ones who died had told us
we wouldn't make it to see Tuesday.
The ones who prodded a sleeping
bear were slaughtered with a lack of graceful
finality and resolution.
The ones with thunder in their hearts had come
singular and with lightless souls.

But we both sported bloody noses,
and we bathed and basked in wartime-tales.

You wanted to start this revolution.
I started.

You next.
kid from yesterday.
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July 27th, 2008 at 06:32am
bump?
purveyors of dreams.
Salute You in Your Grave
purveyors of dreams.
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July 27th, 2008 at 09:04am
Ah wow, I've been brooding over the fact that I think I've lost my touch and I come here and read your work and at least it's comforting to know you, my dearest, you awesome poet, you definitely have your touch intact. Freezing point? Chills, literally. The third stanza especially, such haunting imagery, and impact, I just, I admire your writing so much. At being able to condense a whole story into a poem, yet making it more lengthy than it actually seems to be.

'Your wounds will not befriend you
for very long,
or very much.

This is our tree and we are both beneath it.'

oh hearts, hearts hearts hearts.


"My checklist is long with common ailments of
the youth - cynicism at sixteen, irrational
binders to hate more than I should, perpetual
confusion for the sake of confusion. Then the syndromes
stopped. And next I mastered the virtue of silence."

xD I relate. Oh and how you manage to write woeful dilemmas with words so beautiful.

" life-is-but-a-dream phase, I-could-be-
in-love phase, I-wish-I-wasn’t-nothing.

I wish I wasn’t nothing too.

So then we decided to

leave – or maybe, ‘arrive’, as a
tactful way of letting the ones back home win.
We would not hurt those who have ill’d us,
only let it transpire that we are nothing like them.
That was all well,
and in the written plan: difference is key.
Specialty is the extra pot of un-commercial dish.
"

I quote because I love! Can't analyse it, just wanted to tell you OMGBEAUTIFUL.

Also, I realise a change in your style lately, or maybe it's just that I haven't been reading much lately. Your persona's voice in the poems are much stronger than your previous poems. and, you seem to be using repetitive structure of much lately, which btw, i think is really, really cool. Jessie would say, "proper brilliant!" xD

I started. You next.

Oh brill, Nab.
kings of leon.
Always Born a Crime
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July 27th, 2008 at 09:09am
Nab. This is my new favourite from you.
And some of your others took some beating. But seriously. I just can't get my head around how beautiful you make everything sound.

But we both sported bloody noses,
and we bathed and basked in wartime-tales.

You wanted to start this revolution.
I started.

You next.


You'll go down in history : )

Oh yeah. And it's "proper brilliant" XD
kid from yesterday.
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July 27th, 2008 at 09:47pm
lakjdf;akdsjfasdf Thank you so, so much you guys. ILY2VM. xD <3

_________


Don't feel like bumping, I'll just post this one here! Not a very good one, but I needed to let some stuff out.

Pickled and Prayed.

I am not amongst the post-modern women,
who hang limply upon the thread of life
knowing there would be just grey and bleak waiting below.
Suppose, to you, that faith comes with the territory
of a narrowed road-blocked route. And,
to you, it isn't about the commitment
but rather the committed.

I still try
because I want to.

It isn't a fault of mine that you have given up;
weathered and eroded with age and cynicism.
Suppose some things you don’t talk about. Suppose
some things are meant for me,
and otherwise for you.

I’m not the best representative,
but when the race comes,
in any case,
I would still have something to represent.
SicTransitGloria
Bleeding on the Floor
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August 11th, 2008 at 09:53am
Oh, Nab. They're all so beautiful.
I've missed your poems.
Please keep writing, you have such a talent. You always help me to find beauty and peace when I'm down.
xxxxxxxxxx
kid from yesterday.
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August 12th, 2008 at 09:37pm
Thank you so muchhhhhh. <3 <3
kid from yesterday.
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August 22nd, 2008 at 05:04am
Lack Of Any Particular Romanesque Notions.

My sources have informed me
of enough. There can be no reason
to write what is meaningless in such day and age.
I’m un-strapped from the picturesque blank
paper - I can write for another bastard without
pouring emotion and back-story into ink.
Tight-chained, prayers uttered,
about to dive headlong into some-
thing I am not quite sure of. Against grains.
Against the robots. Against the programme
of wanting to write for meaning.

This is where I start.

Of when Ally had the summer to herself.
She ruled out the possibility of running
humanity as president. She would open
her leaf-décor’d description of piano rock
and torn out the unwanted words, yelling,
“Lousy gimmicks, lousy gimmicks.”
A waste of green. Spaced out. Time to go.
Head out back to the summer and
leave the winter frozen.

And love, if you related to that

Still,
you can always find something
if you’re looking for it.

But most times, “I want to run with color”
is definitive of drug usage of the poet.
Now you know he likes his speed – there’s
the back story for you.
And "pouring itself some wine to defeat tomorrow"
shows his affinity to the golden bottle.
Sometimes, they are the words of items in a
paperclip drawer. No such meaning. No graceful
poetry. Let’s try to not dig so deep.

But you can always find something
if you’re looking for it hard enough.
So dig out the whole garden,
if it pleases you.


-

Sorta an experiment. I wanted to deliberately write something without meaning (for some odd reason, I know. xD). Just to prove that not everything has to have layer after layer of dramatic emotions and shit.

Um, yuh, ok, enough of me waffling. (The title's not supposed to make much sense).
kid from yesterday.
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August 26th, 2008 at 10:41am
For A Crust.

The label-maker threw a verbal fit last night
while the printers rushed for the last batch of shell-
mannequins.
There were only three more,
so they knocked, and they
shook; they threatened a retrenchment if fix-up
took longer than sixty seconds.

The tags it churned were too thick,
the ink smudged and the strings were too short to be knotted.

The forlorn attempt to make
a statement for its kind remained pitiful.
The tags too empty,
the ink illegible and the strings were still there.
The label-maker stays a label-maker.

But it kept on with its anthem;
singing off-key but resolute in spirit.
It was spewing out,
"No no no."
And the mantra’s chorus went the
same.
It was saying,
"T hey ha v emin dsof
th eirow n."
It was telling them,
No no no.
Enough with the unneeded classification.

Though printers only did the work of silent copying
and a stance more vocal, of never-questioning.

But only three were left. They were -
knocking
and shaking
and being rather sinister with mutters of
'and into the bin, we'll dump ye.'
They only needed
[PRETTY BLONDE]
and [THE DESTRUCTIVE POET].
[DESK CLERK BORE WITH TYPE-NONE PERSONALITY]

was a non-obligatory option (cousin of [CLASS GEEK], printed
days before, an easy substitute).

The label maker was choking
on insistence. No, no, no.
Le tthem h avet he irsay.
It spluttered on,
Tag number five.

M yjob isa mist a ke.
I ex ist to func tion as a ty pe cas ter.

No, no no.
They have minds of their own.

Som etim es yo u nee d t odie
to le tyou rvictims st artliving.
Ag ain.

It wheezed, and from a deep
throaty rumble came tag sixteen,

[MISCELLANEOUS].
And the old men cursed, knocking and shaking,
groaning under the weight of the futile machine.
“And into the bin, ye dump.”


[QUINTESSENTIAL MISFIT WHO EXPIRES IN REVOLT]
kid from yesterday.
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September 11th, 2008 at 06:06am
I didn't intend to make this rhyme, heh. Not that it does much.

As of now, untitled.

Sometimes you have to give up –

Though despite all over-paid aphorisms
of battling to survive,
sometimes it would be best to break the shell;
let the insecurities scutter around the white room, peeling
your vulnerability into a fruit of something defenseless.
Sometimes an irremovable stain on linen is the best

criminal record. It’s a matter of direction,
or metaphorical bearings, where to give up is a
reputational disaster.
But to give in would be a permanent choice,
and also something unfixable upon your tombstone.
And at times it’s the thin line between good

and rather evil. At times it’s the life of lies and the lies about
living that boggle the dead and bounce off existence.
Sometimes you have to color in the grey

and then, throw the palette across oceans with resolute
finality. Sometimes the world will let you abuse it,

but you take the beatings with conjured pride.

Sometimes you have to die and live again, to stop your
irrevocable death. You have to cry; you have to lose.
Sometimes you have to perform the sin.
Sometimes you have to give up to
never give in.
kid from yesterday.
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September 12th, 2008 at 03:51am
The Human Bottle.

You express yourself without permission
With little artistic curls of your fingers;
The tinier breaths
you exhaled were filled with just enough meaning
to let the sacrosanct question hang,

limp, like how you like your words sometimes.
To toss up between powerful and
loved; or between practical and poetry. You
balance them upon your fragile shoulders, some-
times over-tipping, but only too slightly
it morphs into a hint of drama. You twist

the emotions into a pretty lyric,
tumbling from lips, some words holding back
taking refuge behind your teeth, but
always managing to flow in unconventional
expression. It should be illicit and
bad,

but you do it too well for it to
be a wrongful addiction.
kings of leon.
Always Born a Crime
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September 12th, 2008 at 05:27pm
The tinier breaths
you exhaled were filled with just enough meaning
to let the sacrosanct question hang,

limp, like how you like your words sometimes.


I dunno what to say really.
I don't think I can critisize, pretty certain I can't. I don't really have a right to. You put me to shame Nab, you're just talented, plain and simple : )
Just wanted to drop by and let you know I still appreciate anything you write <3
kid from yesterday.
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September 13th, 2008 at 01:12am
Aw shit, that comment made me tear up. Thank you so much Jessie. <3 It means so much to me. (:
kid from yesterday.
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September 14th, 2008 at 01:39am
Option A.

I wasn’t looking.

There is almost a sinless quality to
this addiction – of moments knocked breathless
by the horde of your scent, the rent-free
habitation of butterflies in my gut. Thereafter
my lucky stars would run out of good judgement
(though I could never think of hammering down my own).
Losing it would be a far better option, as long as it
gets me a mile nearer or an smile away from
the timid stares that we act out to be glances,
The glances that we pretend were never there.

I wasn’t looking,
and how could you guess if you hadn’t been
looking as well?
kid from yesterday.
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October 13th, 2008 at 04:09am

Examined.

They let me test my human
endurance to the firmament of unknown,

the hair-pin bends telling me
little of what is ahead. After the episode,

with lack of survival, I was pushed into
a sub-defective ride;

like a play on words with
routine as a favoured merriment.

But the dynamite across broken fingers,
broken fingers writing the last of

their concerns onto wet paper
with dry ink.
kid from yesterday.
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October 18th, 2008 at 09:12am
The Waiting Room.

It would be like
sensing the correlation between the dreamer,
and the useless,
sitting like ducks in a pond, making conversation
with time and all of its ways of stealth.
Comparing
the nuances of what we can be
and what we are, to make sure we can let the
confetti lose for that
point in life when everything comes together.

That one.
The one we’re all waiting for.

So you’re stuck glancing at the table clock
knowing what’s coming,
doing little to go about retrieving the little gems you buried,
the claims of a better tomorrow, a far more
exciting tomorrow, a life changing tomorrow.

For future reference.
For delivery when your astuteness is full-blown
in proportions.

And then tomorrow comes; and
you’re glancing at the table clock, knowing what’s coming
Your ticket number still sandwiched in the middle,
no flashing red nor an announcement of Your Name, to head
to the counter for check-out of the parcel.

You waited your whole life for it.
Balancing on the thin line between dreamer and doer,
sitting like ducks in a pond, picking your way
through the ashes and weed of your own messy fantasy.

It could only end up one way or the other.
kings of leon.
Always Born a Crime
kings of leon.
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October 18th, 2008 at 10:45am
Nab you just never faulter. The Waiting Room, I read that as some sort of insightful monologue in a film or something. It came with lots of images and thought and I loved it. You know that monologe at the beginning of Trainspotting? Or the one that plays over the start of LOTR? Something like that. It was a wonderfully astute observation of life and I really, really, really enjoyed it. <3