words words words....

poem info: this is basically written through the eyes of a child about their mother with cancer. i basically got inspired to write this after my friends mum had it. i tried, you judge criticism will be taken note off an comments make me smile thanks x

How can my hero,
So innocent an pure.
Have to leave an go,
Cus of a disease with no cure.

Not just my mother,
She was my best friend.
We just held one another,
Right until the end.

She always tried to hide,
The pain in her eyes.
I felt empty inside ,
After every goodbyes.

You never really knew,
When the last goodbye would be.
Ironically tears where a few,
She held strong for me.

Why did she get cancer,
I constantly asked why her.
I never really got an answer,
From my pleading prayer.

People now just smile,
Not quite knowing what to say.
Its been quite a while,
But i still feel her here today.

Fairytale Father

When I was naive and young,
Your praises to everyone I sung.
Holding me in your welcoming arms,
Telling me stories of witches spells and charms.

Taking me places full of wonder,
Your mesmirising spell I was under.
I thought that's how it would stay,
But now you've gone to far far away.

I no longer know what to do,
Realising I can't live with or without you.
Listening to the lines of a song,
Thinking happily ever after didn't last for long.

I gave up on you can't you see,
You can bugger off with you new family.
It's obvious I don't fit in there,
I was stupid to think you actually care.

You need to see happiness isn't how it looks,
Now I know fairytales are only in books

love sick

Whisper lies in my ear,
Tell me what I want to hear.
Words sending shivers down my spine,
Tell me I'm yours cus' your mine.

Love, lust and pure desire,
Burning inside bright like fire.
Slowly running hands through hair,
Taking in every detail of your face so fair.

I was just a stupid fool,
Who didn't see love as cruel.
Never again will I fall for that trick,
Never again will i be love sick.

Future becoming near,
Letting go off the past.
Trying to forget the fear,
Memories that forever last.

Once a young fool,
Then life took a turn.
The world became cruel,
Cuts began to burn.

People start to leave,
I become confused.
Friends do deceive,
No longer easily amused.

Everybody moves on,
Nothing makes sense.
Familiarity is gone,
Life becomes immense.

An idea that is absurd,
To people like you and me.
She left without a word,
Because of pain we couldn't see.

Many ways can it be done,
None of which is any good.
Whether it's bullets in a gun,
Or poison in pure red blood.

All along she hid her pain,
From everybody, you, me, us.
So we would think she's sane,
And not know what she does.

Shes gone with her fear,
Left us nothing but grief.
Yet I feel her near,
I've got to have some belief

Everything moves on flowing,
No matter how much we try.
To prevent them from knowing,
They sense that we lie.

Promises are always broken,
By people who we trust.
They give us a love token,
But all they really feel is lust.

Pretend you don’t care,
Girly, put your mask on.
But please don’t you dare,
Fall for his clever con.

Once daddy’s lil girl,
Drugs now your best friend.
Your life’s one big swirl,
Until the very very end.

Remembering the lazy days,
Where we were joined at the hip.
Now words stab and fist sways,
Blood pouring out of my lip.

Whatever happened to us,
Whatever happened to you an me.
Now those days are a fuzz,
And there's no apology.

We were friends since forever,
We seemed to make one girl.
You were pretty an i was clever,
Now its all a dizzy swirl.

I don't know what happened,
Why we broke apart.
I don't know what happened,
For you to break my heart.

It kills me all the time,
Why can't it be OK.
If i could fix it with a stupid rhyme,
I would read it every day.

They laugh, point and stare
They think I'm not human
Cus I like guys with long hair
And listen to Gary Numan

They drink until they puke
And riot till they're sore
Then ask about the thin white duke (David Bowie)
And say who the fucks paramore?

They laugh at the sad bits in titanic
Because they're high on drugs
Then they go an dis panic
And put in their ear plugs

They just don't understand
Why the daily mail wasn't right
Is the fact that i like alex turners band
A real reason to start a fight



ok its not quite finished yet but i would like crit and comment on this so that i can edit this and the next bit to make it pretty good

I love the first two. They are incredibly sad but also really heartfelt. And I love the title of your thread too.

They can't understand why,
I don't really socialise.
I don't moan or cry,
I don't read or revise.

They don't like the way,
They can't put me in a box.
I don't know what to say,
So I listen to their mocks

It seems they speak the same,
Yet they don't understand.
I don't want fame,
I just wanna be in a band.

In my fantasy life,
Things are so great.
I can be anybody's wife,
And anybody's mate.

In my fantasy job,
Things are so grand.
They listen to words outta my gob,
Cus I'm in a band.

In my fantsy home,
I have everything I desire.
Kitchen made of chrome,
Family by the fire.

In this real life,
It's not what's in my dreams.
Making friends with a knife,
As life falls apart at the seams.

So laugh you may,
But at least I have faith.
That maybe one day,
I will be safe.

So this our nation,
Obsessed with admiration.
Trying to prove something,
Then becoming nothing.

Girls with tangoed faces,
Going to all the wrong places.
Growing up way to quick,
A routine of drink and sick.

Oh those silly lil boys,
Nicking others toys.
Laughing at others,
Rebelling against mothers.

But don't get me wrong dear,
I know this ain't what you wanna hear.
Not one of us is the same,
We're all just trying to cope in life's game.

wow. You have such a great way with words. Each poem flows wonderfully when i read it. I love the way you have incorporated the slang/lazy language of today in your poetry. There is one comment i would make on the last poem (the one above this post) I would make a change to the final line. You dont have to listen to me afterall it is my opinion only but it doesnt quite read right. I would perhaps change it to:
'We're all just trying to cope in life's little game'
or perhaps:
'We're all just trying to cope in this, life's game' or something to that effect. However it is your poem and therefore up to you what you do with it.
I hope to see more wonderful work in the future. Keep it up, because you have a talent.
All the best
Ash xx

Great poetry. the emotions make it even more better.

You've got two of my absolute favorite things: Emotion and a rhyme scheme.
That makes for kickass poems. Can't wait for more.

Fantasy guy

I need you more than you know,
So please don't leave and go.
You may be in my head and unreal,
But I can't describe the way I feel.

I tell everybody about you,
And they believe the fantasy is true.
When I close my eyes I see your smile,
And there my mind lingers for a while.

What type of person does it make me,
To believe and live in a fantasy.
Because I know your just a fantasy guy,
But I couldn't stop Lying even if I try.

Oh guys I just want to say that thanks for all your comments it literally made my day and that your comments have all been taken into account thanks soooo much
Xxxxxx

If there was anything I could do or say,
To bring you home here today.
You I would do it, darling it's true,
Time hasn't changed how much I miss you.

With your little arms around me,
Whispering into my ear softly.
The words i've been longing for so long,
Truthful an sweeter than a silly love song.

We've both changed alot I know,
But I beg you please don't let go.
The one thing that keeps me sane,
Is knowing there's a chance to see you again

I just wanna say so you will hopefully understand that a lil more is that it is about my baby sister who moved away with my dad x hope that sheds some light on things, of course you can interpret it any way you want x

Hiding

Laughter hides my tears,
While i'm around my peers.
Company hides my loneliness,
While over one person I do obsess.

Silence hides the secrets I seal,
While I overcome the pain I feel.
Sighs hide the anger in my heart,
While I attempt to make a new start.

Tears hide the truthness in my eyes,
While my mouth tells more lies.

Killing love

Love is a word I cannot say,
Something I choke on everyday.
Sticking in my heart like a knife,
Wrecking, confusing everyday life.

I bury it, hide it like it's not there,
I will not fall for it I swear.
I will not play loves twisted game,
I will not put hearts around your name.

Love is twisted, sick yet kind,
It takes over your whole mind.
I will not fall for it, I will not,
Even if your all I've got.