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misa misa.
Shotgun Sinner
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8241 | December 2nd, 2009 at 11:34pm
hey.
thanks so much!
i haven't been online in a while, so my thread was probably buried deep in the achives, hehe.
i'm glad you liked Autumn Leaves. Thanks for the feedback.  |
catlady
Joining The Black Parade
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 220 | December 11th, 2009 at 08:32pm I love you, your writing is absolutely beautiful. You're right, The structure of the poems is a little different, yet I can still hear your unique and amazing voice in words like "sapphire seas", "decadence", and "euphoria". You should seriously think about publishing at some point in your life.
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misa misa.
Shotgun Sinner
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8241 | December 11th, 2009 at 11:21pm thanks, so much Anna!
I would love it if i got published one day; a bit of a dream of mine...
you are so sweet to me! It's great to hear from you after so long. |
misa misa.
Shotgun Sinner
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8241 | December 18th, 2009 at 11:48pm
The trouble with hindsight is you're always wrong.
Did we miss the warning signs?
"Caution:it won't last."
Are we condemned to repeat the past?
It' s always one more second chance,
so you can make the same mistakes.
We cut new wounds over the same old scars
I was wrong to think we'd change
that we could re-write this page.
History always repeats itself.
We follow this roadmap to disaster;
the one we've trod before
bloody memories on the floor.
Look-that's where you said you'd stay
that's where we lost the way.
When did life become a chore?
I was wrong to think we'd change
that we could re-write this page.
History always repeats itself
[this time will there be anything left to resurrect?]
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misa misa.
Shotgun Sinner
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8241 | December 20th, 2009 at 07:36pm A/N: just a quickie.
Morning Whispers
And the morning whispers slowly
of a love I never knew.
And these tears that tickle softly
are of that love,
lost too soon.
Just when i thought your heart
was a heart to call my own.
I lost your heart
to the evening's hold.
Now you won't sing with me
won't dance with me
won't frolic in the sun.
Consumed by the dark
you've ceased to be the one. |
MyChemicalBlack
Salute You in Your Grave
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 2351 | December 20th, 2009 at 10:15pm Love these two poems you posted.
The first, "The trouble with hindsight is you're always wrong" has a title that grabs your attention (or at least mine, lol).
The second, "Morning Whispers", I like the image the first stanza puts into my head.
Well written and an easy flow, good work.  |
misa misa.
Shotgun Sinner
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8241 | December 23rd, 2009 at 07:28pm Thanks, so much.
I am glad you enjoyed them. |
misa misa.
Shotgun Sinner
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8241 | December 26th, 2009 at 08:12pm
A/N: This one is directed to a friend of sorts. I wrote it pretty quickly so i apologise if my expression could be better, or if its a bit too ~ranty.
Bittersweet.
As twilight looms on this day
remember not the tears I cried
or the words you screamed,
the painful silence separating,
but the moments in between
where we briefly, sweetly smiled.
And it might seem wrong to still hold
these memories close by
but I can't quite forget
that sweet crooked smile.
Don't misunderstand; I'm happy
and I don't want you back,
but when you said: "let's be friends"
I thought that meant you wanted to,
I thought that meant you'd try.
And now i am just confused
by the comments that you make.
Is it just because he shares something we never did?
And, I'm not the same?
I'm sorry if I was; a pyschotic, moody bitch
I never meant to be cruel.
Though I won't deny that I was cold
and distant as a rule.
But you seemed so non-chalance
I didn't think you cared,
not this much.
And now I don't know-
are we even friends?
You seem so unimpressed, unahppy with me.
Is our day about to to end?
Or can we once more smile?
Bittersweet.
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KillJoys
Bulletproof Heart
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 25453 | December 30th, 2009 at 07:30pm I really like Bittersweet.
Very raw.
You seem to side step the typical teenage angst, well done.
Plus your theme scores major points with me. |
misa misa.
Shotgun Sinner
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8241 | January 1st, 2010 at 12:11am thankyou so much.
I am really glad you didn't think Bittersweet was too stereotypical,
i was a little afraid it would turn out like that.
thanks for the feedback. |
misa misa.
Shotgun Sinner
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8241 | January 1st, 2010 at 12:14am A/N: any title suggestions would be appreciated.
V
Your name is wet on my lips
when I wake.
I breathe you in like morning air.
In back seats staring up
at cornflower skies
I contemplate-
A smile has the feel of your name.
Nervous happiness,
shyly confess: I love you. |
misa misa.
Shotgun Sinner
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8241 | January 1st, 2010 at 12:28am A/N: again i couldn't think of a title. It's a little rough too. c/c would be appreciated.
VI
Drafting love songs
to express these feelings,
I find words can't contain
the warmth of your nervous laugh,
the way you murmured my name.
And I'm not quite sure what this is
but maybe you could be
something I am good at.
And maybe we could have
something real. |
misa misa.
Shotgun Sinner
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8241 | January 3rd, 2010 at 03:54am Caustic
Another bed is cold tonight,
tears spill from my eyes.
Again vicious memories replay
I want only to rewind,
to that evanescent time
when the world made sense
and grasping we could find
a shred of innocence.
But reality corrodes
my once hopeful heart,
caustic like this grief
it tears me apart.
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kid from yesterday.
Bleeding on the Floor
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 1265 | January 3rd, 2010 at 04:16am I really enjoyed reading V. It was simply structured but the imagery you picked made the whole piece unique and precise. I'm not so good with titles myself so I can't help you there unfortunately, but I usually just title it as the first few words that come to mind after I end the poem. Looking forward to reading more of your stuff! |
misa misa.
Shotgun Sinner
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8241 | January 3rd, 2010 at 04:25am thankyou!
It was a bit of a different style for me so i am glad you thought it worked. |
kings of leon.
Always Born a Crime
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 6213 | January 3rd, 2010 at 03:42pm I really enjoy your work : ) Especially the shorter ones, simple but they seem to carry alot of gravity in such small bursts. Looking forward to your next x |
misa misa.
Shotgun Sinner
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8241 | January 4th, 2010 at 07:55pm thankyou! |
misa misa.
Shotgun Sinner
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8241 | January 4th, 2010 at 07:56pm In Memory
Though skin may fade
and blood run cold,
time can't steal
the stars from your eyes
or erase
the words you said.
Your dreams remain alive.
And the ghost of you still lingers
playing havoc in my head. |
MCRmusicmonster
Really Not Okay
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 612 | January 5th, 2010 at 04:12pm these are really good. I really liked the last two lines. Can't wait for more! |
misa misa.
Shotgun Sinner
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8241 | January 5th, 2010 at 07:25pm Thankyou so much.
It means a lot. |
