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Cherokee
Banned
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 2300 | July 22nd, 2008 at 01:04am
Sad Clown Industry: Zomg... That's a really deep and amazing one... especially the ending xD... Love it...
Really REALLY great work...
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Teach Me To Drown
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Age: 102
Gender: -
Posts: 484 | July 22nd, 2008 at 01:05am thanks so very much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!   |
Teach Me To Drown
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Age: 102
Gender: -
Posts: 484 | July 24th, 2008 at 06:35pm Is This What You Were Planning?
Falling toawrd something
No…no! It can’t be the light
Can you throw me something?
A rope, anything…..
I’ll hold on tight.
Why would you do this
Epsecially to me?
Why would you hurt the one you love
For something you can’t see.
Twirling in and out…
Of Consciousness…
Spinnning rapidly…
Through Breath…
Quickly falling into….
A grieving pit called…
Death.
Why didn’t you try?
To give me something
To hold on to?
Is this what you want?
What you were planning to do?
I trusted you
You trusted me…
Or at least so I thought
Now I’m angry at the world
Because I actually bought…
Your cheap version
Of a personality
You took my only heart
And broke it into three |
Cloud_Envy
Killjoy
Age: 33
Gender: Male
Posts: 4 | July 25th, 2008 at 02:14pm Wow...they were all really good. the sad clown factory had a really good ending even though it was sad |
Teach Me To Drown
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Age: 102
Gender: -
Posts: 484 | July 25th, 2008 at 02:44pm thanks so very much!!!! |
Frank Anthony Iero.
Bulletproof Heart
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 28347 | July 25th, 2008 at 04:26pm Is This What You Were Planning? - This one was really good with a ton of emotion.
It was beautiful in a way.
I like it. =D |
Teach Me To Drown
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Age: 102
Gender: -
Posts: 484 | July 25th, 2008 at 04:34pm thanks so much!!!
it means a lot |
emolove4everurs
Joining The Black Parade
Age: 29
Gender: Female
Posts: 199 | July 25th, 2008 at 05:23pm I love your poetry it holds so much emotion!! You are great at writing!! |
emolove4everurs
Joining The Black Parade
Age: 29
Gender: Female
Posts: 199 | July 25th, 2008 at 05:23pm I love your poetry it holds so much emotion!! You are great at writing!! |
Teach Me To Drown
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Age: 102
Gender: -
Posts: 484 | July 25th, 2008 at 05:29pm thanks so much!!!!!!!!!!! |
emolove4everurs
Joining The Black Parade
Age: 29
Gender: Female
Posts: 199 | July 25th, 2008 at 05:45pm you are so welcome!! |
temptation.
Shotgun Sinner
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 8676 | July 26th, 2008 at 12:07pm |
Teach Me To Drown
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Age: 102
Gender: -
Posts: 484 | July 26th, 2008 at 12:12pm thanks it really means a lot  |
moderndayaxlrose
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Age: 29
Gender: Male
Posts: 407 | July 29th, 2008 at 03:42pm you already know how i feel about these from my PMs to you...your words inspire my guitar playing and someday id love to use some of these as lyrics.=) |
moderndayaxlrose
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Age: 29
Gender: Male
Posts: 407 | July 29th, 2008 at 03:42pm you already know how i feel about these from my PMs to you...your words inspire my guitar playing and someday id love to use some of these as lyrics.=) |
Teach Me To Drown
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Age: 102
Gender: -
Posts: 484 | July 29th, 2008 at 04:27pm awww..thanks so much...im glad i can be inspiring =] |
Teach Me To Drown
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Age: 102
Gender: -
Posts: 484 | July 29th, 2008 at 04:30pm Silently Hiding
I tried to read between the lines
But there seemed to be no words
Apparently I was lied to
About everything I’ve heard
I thought you trusted me
I definitely trusted you
Now that I have no heart
I don’t know what to do
I must have just misplaced it
Like I did the other day
But this time I think
I really ran away
This might be telling me
I should leave this awful place
Go out and find my only heart
And leave behind no trace
I pack up all my things
And close the door silent
I secretly hid my heart
So you could never find it |
Teach Me To Drown
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Age: 102
Gender: -
Posts: 484 | August 4th, 2008 at 11:41am Recipe For Heart-Break
A pocket full of sorrow
A fist full of pain
My heart will never ever
Beat the same
It broke in half
Then shattered into nothing
You don’t even care
So stop bothering
I buried it
In the pit of my chest
Because if I don’t hide it
You’ll only care less
Now that I have found you
I don’t want you to go
But in order to find happiness
You have to
You left in the opposite direction
To only leave my nothing
But a quick and meaningless
Goodbye
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Frank Anthony Iero.
Bulletproof Heart
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 28347 | August 5th, 2008 at 12:36am Silently Hiding - I dunno why, but it feels there could of been more. But, that's just me. X]
It was very good though. =]
Recipe For Heart-Break -
"You left in the opposite direction
To only leave my nothing
But a quick and meaningless
Goodbye"
Loved the ending. Had to quote it.
Hands down, it was great.
Kind of reminded me of a character in a book I've read.
Congrats on getting "Poet Of The Month", by the way. =]
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Teach Me To Drown
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Age: 102
Gender: -
Posts: 484 | August 5th, 2008 at 01:37am thanks so much
and i know what you mean by there seems like there needs to be more
i feel the same way..im still working on it 
and thanks im so happy
it means a lot |
