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Your Ghost.
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 440 | September 25th, 2008 at 06:04pm
I am speechless<3 that was magnificentttttt!!!!!!! |
Your Ghost.
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 440 | September 25th, 2008 at 06:04pm I am speechless<3 that was magnificentttttt!!!!!!! |
MyChemicalBlack
Salute You in Your Grave
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 2351 | September 26th, 2008 at 03:45pm Thanks guys, it means a lot. ^_^ |
MyChemicalBlack
Salute You in Your Grave
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 2351 | September 26th, 2008 at 08:29pm Bastard
He heard something
Oh watch her as she falls
Wayward bells ring
Intoxicating calls
Something’s not right
Parents, I HATE you
Why do we fight?
Something I fear too,
I’m going at this
Way too wrong—freeze!
It’s a hit or miss
Down on my knees,
It can’t be enough
When your kids fear, hate
Instead of the love
The bastard’s irate! |
lolis12007
Really Not Okay
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 655 | September 26th, 2008 at 09:43pm I LOVE YOUR POEMS AND IT'S AWESOME THAT YOU STILL WRTIE POEMS WITHOUT GETTING THE INSPIRATION AWAY...FOR ME ITS HARD THERE'S ALWAYS THAT ONE PERIOD OF TIME THAT I WRITE KICK ASS POEMS THEN I DONT...BUT KOOL POEMS
--LOLIS-- |
Frank Anthony Iero.
Bulletproof Heart
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 28347 | September 27th, 2008 at 12:32am Bastard - hmm, I like this one. =]
Not bad, though..it doesn't seem in place with what you write.
I dunno if that makes since. X]
Still good though. =] |
Your Ghost.
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 440 | September 27th, 2008 at 11:57am Amazinggg<3 :] |
Exposure.
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Age: -
Gender: Female
Posts: 450 | September 27th, 2008 at 03:40pm keep up the good work buddieh!!!!! x] |
MyChemicalBlack
Salute You in Your Grave
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 2351 | September 28th, 2008 at 02:02pm Thank you everyone. 
I was trying something new, though I'm still a little iffy on whether or not to keep doing it.
Ah well, time will tell. Lmao. xD |
MyChemicalBlack
Salute You in Your Grave
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 2351 | September 28th, 2008 at 02:09pm I Killed The Hero
Maybe if I keep saying
“I’m not worthy!”
My demons will stop preying
Keep on hurting!
It’s a rainy day—tonight
Alone in a parking lot
Fingers twitching for a fight
Stomach rolled up in a knot,
I’m the quiet one
The invisible welcome mat
Wipe your feet once done
Make me feel like I deserve that,
How dark is dark?
How lost is lost?
That feeble spark
I chose to toss,
I’m not worthy!
Can’t hold on
Heart’s still hurting
I’m just GONE. |
Your Ghost.
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 440 | September 28th, 2008 at 04:23pm Everytime, you amaze me! well done again!<3 |
MyChemicalBlack
Salute You in Your Grave
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 2351 | September 29th, 2008 at 10:34am Thank you, Addicted2GerardWay, I'm glad you like it. ^_^ |
MyChemicalBlack
Salute You in Your Grave
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 2351 | September 29th, 2008 at 10:35am A Suicide Mistake
Told me last night, “you’re not real”
Stutter back, “What’s this I feel?”
Pull out the tissues, you adore
‘Cause it’s not your life anymore
In a church pew, sit silent
Dressed in black, hardly violent
Preacher’s screaming, “You’re dead!”
Contents spilled out my head
Whisper daylight lies,is it true?
That we know nothing about you?
Oh why did you hide, afraid?
A killing silence you made
Pressure, pressure, caving in
Wonder, wonder, who will win?
You left us, victim’s for life
Tension’s cutting with a knife |
Your Ghost.
Thinking Happy Thoughts
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 440 | September 29th, 2008 at 04:30pm My god. That was wonderfulll<3 I think its my favorite :] |
Frank Anthony Iero.
Bulletproof Heart
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 28347 | September 29th, 2008 at 05:29pm I Killed The Hero - Ah! I just love it. <3
Your poems always flow so well, and have such meaning. X]
A Suicide Mistake - This one is -every word that could mean amazing inserted here- 
Its just, ... wow. =] |
catlady
Joining The Black Parade
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 220 | September 30th, 2008 at 11:15pm Hello!
"A Suicide Mistake"- I love the screaming preacher; that's always how I see them, especially after reading Jonathan Edwards's sermon about how we're all going to hell (what else is new?).
In the last stanza, should there be an apostrophe in "victim's"? And also, in the third stanza, I think there should be a space in "lies,is". I know, grammar police. I'm sorry...
"I Killed the Hero"- ...I felt exactly like that today. Still do, actually. That has to be one of the best poems I've ever read. Powerful ending, of course. |
temptation.
Shotgun Sinner
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 8676 | October 2nd, 2008 at 03:03pm I loved "A Suicide Mistake".Very emotional poem...Amazing job,as usual. (: |
MyChemicalBlack
Salute You in Your Grave
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 2351 | October 3rd, 2008 at 09:20am Thank you everyone, I'm glad you liked it.
Ah, thanks catlady, the word document I wrote it on didn't correct any spelling/grammar. x_x
More soon. ^_^ |
MyChemicalBlack
Salute You in Your Grave
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 2351 | October 3rd, 2008 at 09:23am Lights Out
Here we stand now
Serenading our dreams
Turn the lights out
Lock all the doors
Oh the mind won’t accept
What the heart already knows
Look away, look away
Buy yourself a week
Shook his hand, take a look
“You’ll never see me again”
Just walk away, walk away
Nothing you could do
A piece of art with a flower
They are dead
Close your eyes, count to three
And cry—for they’ll never be. |
Pansy Wayero
Jazz Hands
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 372 | October 3rd, 2008 at 12:41pm ok so ur poems always amaze me but i have to say i love the imagery in 'A Suicide Mistake'. also 'I Killed My Hero' is amazing. i love the rhetorical questions in it. 'how lost is lost?' brilliant!!!!
in the spirit of honesty i really need to read all of ur poems from the first one posted on this thread to the last but i can tell that all of them will leave me speechless! excellente monsieur |
