Your Songs/Lyrics

my chEMMAcal romance:

The Fatality.:

Nekotora, your lyrics are fucking amazing. Beautiful artistry.

i absolutely agree. these lyrics are fucking rad.

Thank you! :>
I like yours too, because it shows emotion and sort of reminds me of a letter written to a friend you know? Very well done! :>

*.* sorry, double post

This is a song called "Silver Lining". I wrote it awhile back but I wanted to see if it needs improvement, because I've never shown it to anybody.

I can see it in your eyes
Every time I look.
I see you for who you are
And all the times you took
The breath away from me.

You can make me laugh, smile, or cry,
But with the blink of an eye,
Break my heart
And make me hope to die.

When I saw your face,
I thought there was
A future for me now.
When I saw your smile,
It told me that
You would stay awhile,
And when I heard your laugh,
All that I could do
Was think about you.

You took my heart away
From me so long ago,
But in all that time,
Just did you ever know?
Or did you play clueless with me?

And in the end, you took the key
And sealed off every heartfelt thing
Within me,
So I wouldn't feel the sting.

When I saw your face,
I thought there was
A future for me now.
When I saw your smile,
It told me that
You would stay awhile,
And when I heard your laugh,
All that I could do
Was think about you.

The light we used to have
I put into the dark,
Because you left so cold.
Well now, he has left a mark.

When I see his face,
I know that I
Have a future now.
When I see his smile,
I know that we
Are gonna go the mile,
And when I hear his laugh,
All that I can do
Is forget about you.

That's the silver lining.
That's the silver lining.
That's the silver lining.
That's my silver lining in life.

I dont have a band. But I love singing and I have great vocals. So I just write songs and poems. Hope you like it!



Make my own day:

[First Verse]
I try, I fail
thats the way I see
I never achieve my goal
Thats how I perceive
(Not anymore) 3 times

[Chorus]
I've been shedding tears all my life
Making it all look miserable
I've been trying to knock myself out
Making it so unbearable
But not anymore,I believe in myself
I am gonna fly high
I'll prove everyone wrong, give it my best
I will make my own day

[Last Verse]
I'll just visualize my dream
And think that it has come to reality
I'll feel the happiness and felicity
I'll think nothing but good
So that good's attracted to me
And thats how I'll be all I wanna be

[Chorus]
I've been shedding tears all my life
Making it all look miserable
I've been trying to knock myself out
Making it so unbearable
But not anymore,I believe in myself
I am gonna fly high
I'll prove everyone wrong, give it my best
I will make my own day

Asiah Scott:

I dont have a band. But I love singing and I have great vocals. So I just write songs and poems. Hope you like it!

I really like your song! I love the opposition and transition in it. It's really good! :>

Hey! Thanks alot Nekotora=)
I am glad you liked it!

Hey! Thanks alot Nekotora=)
I am glad you liked it!

Yeah, I agree with Nekotora! You're lyrics are really good and it sounds like you already have the whole song set up, like you know how exactly to sing it and stuff. Do you?

Nekotora:
I read your updated lyrics and I love it! It's amazing! My favorite verse is the one that goes like this:
And in the end, you took the key
And sealed off every heartfelt thing
Within me,
So I wouldn't feel the sting.

^Simply amazing. :] *<: -) (haha, santa!)
Thought it's kinda sad, it's really good too and I love how you put in silver lining as the title and how you positioned it in the song, very clever!

I call #1 fan spot for Nekotora!

Nekotora: i think silver lining is awesome. i love the way that the lyrics are easy to relate too, without seeming cliched

asiah scott: ahh. i love lyrics with a positive message.
"I am gonna fly high
I'll prove everyone wrong, give it my best
I will make my own day"
^i love that bit. do have anymore songs? you need to post them!

i posted the chorus for this song a while back, and i've finally got some ideas for the verse happening. they're still very rough though, so feed back would be greatly appreciated i think i need to start it differently, it just randomly jumps in.

verse
mum i'm sorry
but this i need to say
i can't take anymore
of seeing you live this way

love may be blind
but it shouldn't hurt
you shouldn't have to get used
to being treated like dirt

chorus
hit me harder
and cut me deeper
whatever you need
if it makes you feel bigger
rip my hair out
and bruise me darker
whatever you need
if it makes you feel stronger

bridge
*haven't quite worked it out, something about getting away, but i need one coz i have an awesome guitar part to go here*

verse
it used to be different
i can deal when you shout
but now the violence has started
mum it's time to get out

broken homes
they mean broken kids
but it's got to be better
then living like this

then chorus and bridge... and i dunno after that. i just really wanna figure out these lyrics because i've got the guitar part and what not, and i just really wanna finish it so i can record it. so as i said before, i'll take any suggestions on board. thanks

Wow thanks you guys! And black precision: Yay santa!!! ha ha
And also, my chEMMAcal romance: I think that your lyrics are very great and show a lot of emotion and courage. The beginning isn't random in my opinion and I like the way it starts. I'm sure you'll find the words for the bridge somehow. :>

Black precision: Thanks alot! I am glad you liked it. Its my practise: When I write the lyrics, I keep the tune in mind. I was sad when I wrote this song, so I just was trying to make myself feel positive.


Nekotora: Wow! Love your song. Thats my favourite part:
When I saw your face,
I thought there was
A future for me now.
When I saw your smile,
It told me that
You would stay awhile,
And when I heard your laugh,
All that I could do
Was think about you.

And thats what matters...to put out all you're feeling. You exactly did that..=)


My chemical romance: Thanks so much for the positive response. I will surely update more of mine. And about your song. Its really good! I loved every part of it! The chorus was the best but it was great throughout!=)

Asiah Scott:

Black precision: Thanks alot! I am glad you liked it. Its my practise: When I write the lyrics, I keep the tune in mind. I was sad when I wrote this song, so I just was trying to make myself feel positive.


Nekotora: Wow! Love your song. Thats my favourite part:
When I saw your face,
I thought there was
A future for me now.
When I saw your smile,
It told me that
You would stay awhile,
And when I heard your laugh,
All that I could do
Was think about you.

And thats what matters...to put out all you're feeling. You exactly did that..=)


My chemical romance: Thanks so much for the positive response. I will surely update more of mine. And about your song. Its really good! I loved every part of it! The chorus was the best but it was great throughout!=)

Thank you! :>
And also I can't wait to see more of your songs too! You're very good :>

I wrote this recently. It's not finished yet but...yeah, it's what I had so far. Okay here it is:

It's so quiet through the door
But it's so hard to ignore
Your body on the floor
Tonight I'll fall asleep
With these memories I keep
of the pain that scars so deep
Scars from this engagement ring
I need to throw it away
Now I only have these songs to sing
To the hearse where you now lay

Could I take this pain away
and cry there for you
and die there for you
Would it be enough to say
I miss you
I'm so sorry

Ah, choruses...not good at them. Oh well.

^ i like how you don't use a conventional rhyming scheme. it makes things more interesting, mixes things up, and i like it i also like how you've poured so much emotion into it. awesome work



and thanks so much for the positive comments guys.
they mean this much too me <------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------->

Black Presicion: That's an awesome song so far and I can't wait to see what you add to it. Like my chEMMAcal romance said, I love the emotion put into it.
That's really great work! :>

Thanks so much! Those comments mean so much to me, I feel so happy!
Especially thanks for saying that I put a lot of emotion into it, that really means a lot.

You're welcome :>
I made a new song today and was wondering if I needed to work on anything on it. The song is called Gossip Shot (like alchohol drink). :>

Her pleasantries can never fool me.
Though her appearance can alter,
The paint I see upon her skin
Never leads my mind to falter.

Her tongue stirs her venomous cup,
Filled with sugar and deceit.
She serves the next victim in the lineup
Then sinks below to taste the heat.

~Chorus~
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Living a life of dealing out lies
Gives her a feeling she can’t describe,
But though she lingers on this way,
Her thoughts of leaving don’t compromise
Her day.
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Another round to augment the rush!
She lives on from tension’s spirit.
Never kiss her lips of distrust.
You’ll start to numb and never feel it.

The ones who seem to drink away
Don’t taste the liquid that they swallow.
Down the sea of red cliché,
And then, you’ll feel your morals hollow.

(Chorus)

Satisfied with all you’ve done?
Coming to confess and atone?
Does it give you redemption
And hide the seeds you’ve sown?

(Chorus)